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Liz Mastin

Ropes of Gold Villanelle

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Liz Mastin

The sun inclines the waves to glow

Across my turquoise ocean view;

The sea alive with ropes of gold.

 

The storms of yesterday have flown.

The skies take on a brilliant hue.

The sun inclines the waves to glow.

 

Now soaring seagulls (circling) go

The way they did when life was new;

The sea alive with ropes of gold.

 

It was the time when mankind strolled

In Eden's lovely habitude.

The sun inclines the waves to glow.

 

But Adam's tempted heart grew cold

And entertained ingratitude;

The sea alive with ropes of gold.

 

As breakers wash the white-sand shore,

I share with you my seaside muse:

The sun inclines the waves to glow;

The sea alive with ropes of gold.

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Tinker

Hi Liz,  This is a lovely Villanelle.  The limited rhyme didn't give you any trouble, nice use of near rhyme.  The image "ropes of gold" is unique and beautiful.  Nice way to introduce yourself to the members. 

~~Tink


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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eclipse

this is lovely

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Liz Mastin

Thank you, eclipse. I'm glad you enjoyed it! I enjoy Villanelles and would encourage others to choose to write them.

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tonyv

Liz, this is beautifully composed. And I do like how it blames Adam but makes no mention of Eve. Altogether, very nice work.

Tony 😀


Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Liz Mastin
6 hours ago, tonyv said:

Liz, this is beautifully composed. And I do like how it blames Adam but makes no mention of Eve. Altogether, very nice work.

Tony 😀

I'm so glad you like it Tony! It was my view in CanCun, Mexico.

Eve shouldn't have allowed herself to be influenced by the serpent! And then Adam (actually) was only trusting "her". Yet, they both had been warned!

So, Who did they believe? God, or hearsay?

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