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jakecaller

my chan

 

making love to you as snow falls

take away the blues for to day

 nothing but the blues  birds call 

nothing more the blues snowing 

the wild birds call continues snowing

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tonyv

Very, very nice , Jake. I like how you use "blues" where the reader would expect "blue." It' hard-hitting, very winter, light a fire how bout a dedication?

Nice,

Tony


Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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jakecaller

thanks for the feedback glad you like it

 

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dr_con

Yes, really enjoyed TY for sharing

J


"Everything is trying to Prove the Perfection of its own Perception" Dr. Concrescence's The Law of EPPP

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misterpoet

I enjoyed how you used

blue

also. a soothing subtle poem.


misterpoet

 

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