badger11 Posted January 8, 2020 Share Posted January 8, 2020 Tintagel Her loving voice is like a dripping tap. Tip-tap, tap-tip, a dripping tap, he twists so tight the washer snaps. A break is best, the sea maybe, perhaps a cup of tea? He drives past hives that brim with honeyed lives, a winding road along a smugglers' coast of coves where lovers surf and tickle toes, in quest to find the castle climbing high. He waits alone in line behind a girl who's dressed in summer frock and sunny smile, and when the waves start whisp'ring Guinevere, he laughs, for is he not Sir Lancelot? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted January 9, 2020 Share Posted January 9, 2020 Absolutely adore the strong images, the lighthearted shadows of intense moments: On 1/8/2020 at 6:06 AM, badger11 said: so tight the washer snaps On 1/8/2020 at 6:06 AM, badger11 said: of coves where lovers surf and tickle toes, in quest to find the castle climbing high. The reference to arthur's birth place(? if I remember correctly) The multimedia inclusion of the water color it's placement in January against the strong summer vibe. I could go on but why bother picking at perfection;-) Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted January 10, 2020 Author Share Posted January 10, 2020 Thanks J. January is always lurking in summer. best Phil Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted January 13, 2020 Share Posted January 13, 2020 Phil, I remember the poem. Now, I can match a painting to the poem! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted January 14, 2020 Author Share Posted January 14, 2020 Thanks Tony and for sorting the alignment! best Phil Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
A. Baez Posted March 1, 2020 Share Posted March 1, 2020 So nice to see some artwork of yours, Phil! It is lovely! I love what looks like the shadow of a large cloud looming over half the visible sea, and how it echoes the line of the visible cloud above...and the way the castle seems to be hovering mystically above a layer of mist. And the poem--wow! I just love the sonances--the half-rhymes, the internal rhymes, and the internal half-rhymes, all underlaid with a fleet wry humor that keeps me feeling like I'm leapfrogging from one idea to the next with every few words. The sublime mixes with the ridiculous here in an easy manner and flawless rhythm. Quote Her loving voice is like a dripping tap. Tip-tap, tap-tip, a dripping tap, he twists so tight the washer snaps Ha! I like trying to decide whether this is a metaphor for him trying to shut her up, or a wry coincidence that he's working on fixing some plumbing even as she speaks to him drippingly. It works either way. Quote the washer snaps. A break is best This made me laugh--breaks can be bad or good...or just lucky! A vivid metaphor: Quote He drives past hives that brim with honeyed lives And in Quote of coves where lovers surf and tickle toes, "coves" and "lovers" look so good together...and their half-assonance followed by the t's' alliteration is great. Wham, bam--double punch! An excellent poem and painting alike--I highly enjoyed the pair. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted March 1, 2020 Author Share Posted March 1, 2020 Pleased you enjoyed both forms AB. It is a old poem that I had published in the Centrifugal Eye magazine https://issuu.com/centrifugaleye/docs/tceautumn2013-jeweled/29 The watercolour is a more recent hobby. best Phil Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
A. Baez Posted March 2, 2020 Share Posted March 2, 2020 I'm glad the poem got its proper due. What's up with that title font the magazine used, though? 😂 I'd love to get back into painting, but it may well be something that has to wait for retirement. It's almost impossible for me to keep my life balance just doing poetry! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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