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Watercolours by Badge (January)

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Tintagel

Her loving voice is like a dripping tap.
Tip-tap, tap-tip, a dripping tap, he twists
so tight the washer snaps. A break is best,
the sea maybe, perhaps a cup of tea?

He drives past hives that brim with honeyed lives,
a winding road along a smugglers' coast
of coves where lovers surf and tickle toes,
in quest to find the castle climbing high.

He waits alone in line behind a girl
who's dressed in summer frock and sunny smile,
and when the waves start whisp'ring Guinevere,
he laughs, for is he not Sir Lancelot?

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dr_con

Absolutely adore the strong images, the lighthearted shadows of intense moments:

On 1/8/2020 at 6:06 AM, badger11 said:

so tight the washer snaps

 

On 1/8/2020 at 6:06 AM, badger11 said:

of coves where lovers surf and tickle toes,
in quest to find the castle climbing high.

The reference to arthur's birth place(? if I remember correctly) The multimedia inclusion of the water color it's placement in January against the strong summer vibe. I could go on but why bother picking at perfection;-)


"Everything is trying to Prove the Perfection of its own Perception" Dr. Concrescence's The Law of EPPP

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badger11

Thanks J. January is always lurking in summer.

best

Phil

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tonyv

Phil, I remember the poem. Now, I can match a painting to the poem!

Tony 


Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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badger11

Thanks Tony and for sorting the alignment!

best

Phil

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A. Baez

So nice to see some artwork of yours, Phil! It is lovely! I love what looks like the shadow of a large cloud looming over half the visible sea, and how it echoes the line of the visible cloud above...and the way the castle seems to be hovering mystically above a layer of mist.

And the poem--wow! I just love the sonances--the half-rhymes, the internal rhymes, and the internal half-rhymes, all underlaid with a fleet wry humor that keeps me feeling like I'm leapfrogging from one idea to the next with every few words. The sublime mixes with the ridiculous here in an easy manner and flawless rhythm.

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Her loving voice is like a dripping tap.
Tip-tap, tap-tip, a dripping tap, he twists
so tight the washer snaps

Ha! I like trying to decide whether this is a metaphor for him trying to shut her up, or a wry coincidence that he's working on fixing some plumbing even as she speaks to him drippingly. It works either way.

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the washer snaps. A break is best

This made me laugh--breaks can be bad or good...or just lucky!

A vivid metaphor:

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He drives past hives that brim with honeyed lives

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of coves where lovers surf and tickle toes,

"coves" and "lovers" look so good together...and their half-assonance followed by the t's' alliteration is great. Wham, bam--double punch!

An excellent poem and painting alike--I highly enjoyed the pair.

 

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A. Baez

I'm glad the poem got its proper due. What's up with that title font the magazine used, though? 😂 I'd love to get back into painting, but it may well be something that has to wait for retirement. It's almost impossible for me to keep my life balance just doing poetry!

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