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A couple of little haiku


Tinker

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Observations of the morning...

lion winds roar
and blow away April blossoms
no lambs this spring
                 ~~ jvg

spring grass
drought yellowed
in April
              ~~jvg

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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I think these are perfect, Tinker. I relish the feeling of desolateness I get when I read them. It's especially pronounced in the third line of the first haiku.

 

Tony

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Tinker,

 

Yes, Tinker. Very observant.

 

late March winds

blow away April blossoms

 

See what March winds did to April blossoms! Great line.

 

Lake

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Aleksandra

I love them too Tink. The first one is wonderful. Well expressed. The spring is always so inspirational.

 

Thank you.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

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Tinker,

 

I have to admit, first I was lost in timing in these two lines,

 

late March winds

blow away April blossoms

 

I pondered on this, how could March winds blow away April blossoms? Then I thought it made sense in that because of the bad weather in March, April flowers didn't bloom. Anyway, it made me think. Something makes a reader think is not a bad thing, I think.

 

Best,

 

Lake

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Thanks Lake, I was thinking of the old proverb, "March comes in like a lion and goes out like a lamb". Only this year it didn't, the lion winds kept coming into April. Today it is more a lamb day, but too late... many blossoms have already blown away.

 

stillness of summer

blankets struggling new garden 

what happened to spring?

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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Tinker excellent! Of course, we did have unseasonal late rain two weeks ago and more projected this weekend- with the hottest temps on record the last few days= Brush Fires- Yes CA will burn again this summer- and because of the sheer shortsighted nature of the water wars umm sorry icon_redface.gif For those not in California- rant inspired by the

drought yellowed

line

 

Clmate Change combined with complete incompetence and greed is turning California into the poster child of what will happen too fast---

 

Rant off icon_biggrin.png

 

Thanks Tink!

 

DC

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Hi DC, Thanks for the added insight... don't get me started on the subject of water... it is my favorite rant... We are way behind in rainfall. I fear I may be trucking water this summer. It was 89 at my house yesterday, in April? And the winds have been horendous. I had claims for trees falling on houses and cars up until just a couple of days ago.

 

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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goldenlangur

Hi Tink,

 

Vivid and evocative - your haiku certainly depicts another image of spring. How poignant the April blossoms blown away and the drought yellowed grass.

 

goldenlangur

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