rhymeguy Posted May 24, 2009 Share Posted May 24, 2009 Ugly white monster staring at me with eyes unseen, a mocking evil glare. Had you a throat you would laugh, a sneering guttural sound. You defeat me with your silence. Though you possess secrets you offer none. Though pushed and cajoled you yield nothing. You tease with hope but deliver despair. And I, fool that I am, stare back at you, beseeching you to show mercy though I know you never will. But I will not succumb to your torture. I will engage you eternally. For I am a poet, damn it! And you are only paper. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 24, 2009 Share Posted May 24, 2009 A nice poem about the process of writing poems- Well done, and the Dr.'s best cure for going thru a dry spell DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 24, 2009 Share Posted May 24, 2009 I love how you fought back against the "ugly white monster" by composing this free form poem. This part is especially frustrating: Though you possess secrets you offer none. Though pushed and cajoled you yield nothing. You tease with hope but deliver despair. In the end, you manage it all with a bit of defiance. Well done. One small suggestion: perhaps the title could simply be The Blank Page? In the first line you provide that detail ... Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rhymeguy Posted May 24, 2009 Author Share Posted May 24, 2009 Thanks guys! I am affraid I will be producing a lot more of this "frustrated stuff" as I am (frustrated that is.) Probabably good for me. As you know I think in rhyme. Of late rhyme is just not coming to me so I am trying to branch out. So I guess out of frustration may come experience. So if you see some real crap don't hesitant to say so. I changed the title. rg Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frank E Gibbard Posted May 24, 2009 Share Posted May 24, 2009 Nice one rg, we here can relate, the demanding void. Did you mean secrets not secretes BTW? Frank Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rhymeguy Posted May 24, 2009 Author Share Posted May 24, 2009 Of course I meant secrets- never could spell worth a sh... :). Made the change. Glad you could identify. Thanks for reading and commenting. rg Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted June 10, 2009 Share Posted June 10, 2009 Interesting and lovely poem. You are doing fine out of rhyme - ( I sound like a rhyme girl now ). Really, I love your " frustrated " works rg. You played around very wise with the spirit of this wonderful poem. I love this expression: You defeat me with your silence. Also I enjoyed this part very much: You tease with hope but deliver despair. And I, fool that I am, stare back at you, this line is perfect: For I am a poet, damn it! Thanks for the enjoyable read Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted June 10, 2009 Share Posted June 10, 2009 The paper beast! one many of us will relate to rg badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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