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  2. badger11

    Digs

    Thank you David. Very much appreciate the nuances of your reading. all the best Phil
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  4. David W. Parsley

    Digs

    Spare yet vivid. Echoes of W. C. Williams here, with a healthy dose of Gary Snyder type serenity, but with a family comfort not often found in either. Nice, - David
  5. Earlier
  6. badger11

    Miller's Pond

    Thanks for reading these blog/pub. poems Tony. There are some diverse US mags out there!
  7. badger11

    Digs

    Thanks Tony. Wright! Thank you very much😀
  8. tonyv

    You

    Thank you David (belatedly), for your kind reply. I like how you've speculated that there could be more to this poem -- I love when the thoughtful reader entertains possibilities of more -- but this one is only what's there. The birds, like the "you," are unfazed by the potential available at those wires, high up on the pole. The electricity represents the higher math and "you." The birds are not the higher math, because they obviously do not understand any of it, but they are like the higher math, and by design, they are not hurt by the high voltage; they just safely, and seemingly with ease,
  9. tonyv

    Oddball

    Phil, another intriguing poem. It's intense, even a bit unsettling. I loved it. Tony
  10. tonyv

    DM du Jour

    Excellent work, elegantly presented. The poem itself left my flesh cringing, crawling. Tony
  11. tonyv

    Miller's Pond

    Very nicely presented, Phil. This poem is new to me. I don't recall having ever seen it anywhere else. Tony
  12. tonyv

    Son

    I find David's remarks intriguing. I don't feel qualified to chime in on the content, but I will say that the poem seems remarkably concentrated, intense. I'm looking forward to David's additional thoughts. Tony
  13. tonyv

    Dystopia

    Thankfully, for now, our members here are still able to offer their own opinions. Could there be a day when replies to poems will be generated by questionably-well-meaning artificial intelligence's application of injudicious algorithms? I hope not! Tony 🤯
  14. tonyv

    Risen

    Barry, I like how you present the events within a purview of a "big picture." A welcome hopefulness abounds. Tony
  15. tonyv

    Digs

    Wright-like and to my liking -- there are two things that make this poem personal and thus "real": the mention of "my son" and the local reference. I was going to say that the presentation could be enhanced by the inclusion of what I call "album art" -- a picture -- but when I went to Wikipedia to read about Cardigan Bay and to look for a picture, I concluded that then the experience would, in effect, be just the opposite: the poem would enhance any picture one could find online, save a photograph from another decade, from that day; that's the only picture which could enhance the experience of
  16. tonyv

    No Words Are Needed

    Nice one, Joel. I'm glad you answered each question in the affirmative (and truthfully)! Tony 😀
  17. Tinker's Poetic Forms: Variant-rhymed Quatrain (gurunAthan ramaNi) 01. People swallow! (iambic tetrameter: aaxa) Whate'er you say, I don't follow Whate'er you write, is all hollow You are a popular poet because You're rich that makes people swallow! 02. We want rain! (iambic trimeter: xaaa) It needs to rain today The wind is warm and dusty The fallen leaves are rusty And the earth is hard and crusty! 03. The monkey! (iambic trimeter: axaa) To see or not to see To do or not to do The monkey on the tree It made a choice--to flee! 04. The rose
  18. David W. Parsley

    Twilight at Point Fermin

    Hi Joel, I love your experience of the poem as a painting in the act of being created, with details filling in as the reader "watches." In accepting the poem, the editors of Tiny Seed Literary Journal commented that the "... poem is rich and complex in meaning and imagery." Your observation pleasingly enlivens that characterization. I also appreciate your comment about the opening as being "inviting." One of the most difficult things in writing a poem is leading off with something that compels the reader to come in and experience. Delighted it worked so well for you. Thank You,
  19. David W. Parsley

    Twilight at Point Fermin

    Tony, as always your insights key precisely into the poem's essence, the emotional journey and its context. At PMO I can always be sure to find not only an audience that is literate and acute, but emotional accompaniment. I like the way you can feel the undertow of the everyday strengthening as the poem progresses, yet with the family intimacy and wonder of the experience intact. But the acuity is there, too, resonating with the enjambment. Very validating. Oh, and thanks too for the comment on the poem's appearance. A lot of my older poems suffered a few years ago with unintended si
  20. gurunAthan

    Family, Temple (Arabesque couplets)

    Thanks, Phil for your suggestions about sonics. Since it needs to be a head-rhyme, and the continuing action sets the mood, I used the -ing. Perhaps I should try another verse, with better sonics. Thank you, again. gurunAthan
  21. badger11

    Digs

    My son buries my feet in sand with his red spade. The sun's unfolding a gold-leaf across Cardigan bay. I dream of sleep. He digs.
  22. badger11

    Family, Temple (Arabesque couplets)

    hi There are exotic elements in your poem that attracted my interest...sari, temple...and also, as Tony says, the mood (the domestic picture). The form has provided a frame for the write, though the inversion quoted above and all those -ing sounds detract from the poem's pleasures (after all sonics are a primary attraction for reading poetry). hope that helps some Phil ps I notice England's first Test is in Chennai. I expect an easy win for India after their terrific performance against Australia.
  23. gurunAthan

    Chitrakavi: Picture-Verse

    Chitrakavi: Picture-Verse Chitrakavi or Chitra-bandha or chitra-kavya is a form of verse that originated in Sanskrit and popularized in Tamil prosody. In this form, a verse is bound (bhanda) inside a picture (chitra). The verse need not be about the picture. It can be on any subject that the poet desires, but its letters should fit within the various crisscrossing dhruva (pre-determined fixed points) inside a chitra (picture). If you search in Google images, with the term 'chitrakavya sanskrit', an amazing number of simple and complicated picture-verses would crop up! Even a pun
  24. gurunAthan

    Mom, Dad and Me! (ABBA or Mirror Poem)

    Yes, it is about an imagined only child, Joel Josol. As Tinker would explain the ABBA poetic form uses internal rhymes, in reverse order: Phone and paddad alone! Really educative, her explanations, to try the forms as exercises or full blown poems. And no, this poem is not about the narrator, but about an imagined first person. gurunAthan
  25. JoelJosol

    No Words Are Needed

    Thanks gurunAthan for the read. I am glad that you enjoyed it.
  26. JoelJosol

    This Bed

    Thanks A. Baez. Yes, it is a poem about missing someone who was absent for a time.
  27. JoelJosol

    This New Year's Eve

    Thanks Tony. I am glad that the gambling trope added interest in the figuring out of the unknown.
  28. JoelJosol

    Wind horse

    I am not familiar with NA mythology but the poem gives me a surreal feeling the equivalent of abstract from the visual arts. The power of the poem, to me, is in the mystery it evokes.
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