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One Two Three, Ring!

The goal was set last June
when in a loss they heard the tune
of victory for other men.
Defeated then.
Through eighty two
their mantra grew
to send
a message round the bend
that they would be the champs
they revved up all the amps.
Then playoffs tested heart and grit
and they proved up for it.
Yes, it came true,
L.A. Lakers gained their due!
                      ---Judi Van Gorder

 

 

Congratulations to the LA Lakers on winning the NBA Championship! Go Lakers!

 

Sorry, got caught up in the moment and just discovered a 16th century French verse form and I thought I'd experiment with it. Freie Verse

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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I knew somehow before reading the last line that you were celebrating the Lakers. While I am not a fan of the game it has been hard to miss the drama. What is the story behind the "Laker Hater" phenomenon that I have heard about?

As far as the poem goes, well written and fun to read. I of course like that it rhymes. A great tribute and nicely presented.

 

rg

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I liked how you applied the old form to a contemporary subject, Tinker. The whole thing flows quite well, but I think my favorite part has to be "they revved up all the amps." icon_smile.gif Very clever. Enjoyed this occasional poem.

 

Tony

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Tinker agree with the above- Personally I don't care much for organized sports, despite the occasional soccer fiending- But this was a lovely spontaneous adaption of an old form to fit your immediate and enthusiastic needs;-)

 

DC

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Tony would say this is a contemporary 14-line sonnet-like poem. It has its turn.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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goldenlangur

Hi Tink,

 

 

I like how you capture the build-up to that moment:

 

Through eighty two

their mantra grew

to send

a message round the bend

that they would be the champs

 

Congratulations :wine:

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

go Miami Heat!

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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