rhymeguy Posted July 19, 2009 Share Posted July 19, 2009 (edited) The Plague Horses and wagons over rust red clay carried the dead away that day. The living there left could neither go nor stay, nothing to do but wait, wander and pray. Wait to be told that they too had died; wander the shadows where the waiting cried; pray that another Would be taken and tried; they might be spared the long final ride. Waiting is wasted, prayers go unheard. Living is tenuous, dying assured. The order is set. The die has been cast. When, is irrelevant, first or last. When it was over no one was spared. Nobody cried. Nobody cared. The last ones to die lay where they fell. There was no one to guide them to heaven or hell. When they were found a great pyre was set. The flames licked their bone without regret. Their ashes were blown across the annals of time and spread throughout the words of this rhyme. Their memories' now entered in this book of the lost. Their souls now counted and tallied the cost. Alas now they rest; their story is told. They lived, loved and died both the young and the old. Edited July 30, 2009 by rhymeguy Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted July 19, 2009 Share Posted July 19, 2009 Quite an entertaining read, Rhymeguy. The setting could be medieval, or it could be a later period. In any case, I like how you handle the subject from beginning to end. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted July 20, 2009 Share Posted July 20, 2009 Hi rg, In this powerful poem how effectively you show that although the deaths were recorded how essentially devoid of any personal feelings and grief these were: When it was over no one was spared. Nobody cried. Nobody cared. The last ones to die lay where they fell. There was no one to guide them to heaven or hell. I love how you describe here Horses and wagons over rust red clay Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rhymeguy Posted July 25, 2009 Author Share Posted July 25, 2009 My thanks to Tony and goldenlanqur for reading this little poem and for such kind comments. I am pleased that you both found something of value therein. It is always rewarding to see the thoughts of others and know that a work has had an effect for good or ill. Thanks guys, rg Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted July 28, 2009 Share Posted July 28, 2009 A thoroughly enjoyable lament! Set outside of time, the narrator seems out of history himself. Playful and sad- a good read- I want to hear it with Harp and Violin- Maybe Lisa Gerrard as the Singer- Dead Can Dance as the band? Thanks for the pleasure RG... BTW i think The dye has been castb should be die not the coloring rather the cutting out of? I could be wrong on the spelling etc. In a bit of a rush right now;-) Thanks! DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rhymeguy Posted July 30, 2009 Author Share Posted July 30, 2009 Thank you good Dr. I was most flattered by your thinking and remarks. I am always please when you read and approve anything I offer. And yes you are quite right "die" is the appropriate word. I am a very poor speller. rg Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted August 4, 2009 Share Posted August 4, 2009 Hello rg. This is very powerful poem written in a strong spirit. The start of the poem hits: Horses and wagons over rust red claycarried the dead away that day. Strong poem. I loved this one. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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