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night is right


demonicdevidom

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demonicdevidom

In the night.

I thrive for you.

When the stars shine down.

Upon our souls.

 

Time becomes a broken glass.

That can provoke a lot of things.

Tonight is all I need.

To make you feel so right

 

With the sight of the moonlight.

That lights over us.

And makes our love seem so bright.

I know its right to say.

 

I love you my dearest.

When you rest on my chest.

You can hear the beat of my heart.

Beating a rhythm that,would never

..............tear us apart................

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

HI Dominick, the last stanza is very classy. the first two stanzas have excellent metaphors and the third stanza is a charming similie, i enjoyed this. you have talent. when i was your age i wish i was only half as smart as you. keep them coming my young friend. hopefully one day you will find the right companion in life. till than enjoy all the fish in the sea.

 

victor

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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hopefully one day you will find the right companion in life. till than enjoy all the fish in the sea.

 

:D Vic you made me smile :), can be metaphore also.

 

Dominick you are doing just fine. Nice expressions.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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