dr_con Posted August 20, 2009 Share Posted August 20, 2009 (edited) Building the Temple: Phase 1 "Here comes the bad man" announced to a mostly empty bus an artisan with a need for speed starting and stopping empty gilded conversations crafting stainglass panels to-let the light in He understands continuously continuously continuously rejected there are bigger blueprints moving from nooks the size of grain directly to scales of mountains and oceans beneath the circumscribed sight of the Sun One of several-billion an example to grasp the unknowable-infinite and something to hold-unto when dealing with gods who have gone a little crazy trying to construct such a small fleshy container myopic in scope for it all. Edited August 20, 2009 by dr_con Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted August 21, 2009 Share Posted August 21, 2009 Perhaps I will figure out your creative formula, Dr. Con. :icon_cool: ... Perhaps I should ride the bus more often! :) The poem is well-crafted. There's not too much and not too little. Nothing is out of place. This part seems to say (with a bit of irony) that God has a sense of humor: continuouslycontinuously continuously rejected there are bigger blueprints moving from nooks the size of grain directly to scales of mountains and oceans ... From title to finish, the religious/secular dichotomy is consistent, balanced, and played out well. The poem is also visually pleasing. As usual, well done. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted August 23, 2009 Author Share Posted August 23, 2009 Perhaps I should ride the bus more often! :) This part seems to say (with a bit of irony) that God has a sense of humor: From title to finish, the religious/secular dichotomy is consistent, balanced, and played out well. The poem is also visually pleasing. As usual, well done. Tony Thanks for riding along Tony! I appreciate the feedback and appreciate your insight as always ;-) BTW I don't drive so Buses are my lot- the eternal Passenger ;-) Of course with peak oil and the other attendant problems of our modernity it makes me look like a progressive prophet;-) DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted August 27, 2009 Share Posted August 27, 2009 As much as I read the more this poem, I like it better. Wonderful essential poem Dr.Con. The title is very atrcative and captures the attention, and the poem offers a lot. Thanks for sharing. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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