JoelJosol Posted September 20, 2009 Share Posted September 20, 2009 To fall asleep on this seat, on a long haul flight, may appear to shake you off my thoughts, but the air turbulence will shake me awake instead. The airplane's ceiling lamps are all turned-off but you are my reading light, spot lit on the laptop, my hands and fingers busy on the keys. Maybe, it's the best way to ride this disturbance: you- distracting me. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted September 20, 2009 Share Posted September 20, 2009 A good closure here. I like how you make the air turbulence resonate with the emotional turbulence. Thank you. Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted September 21, 2009 Share Posted September 21, 2009 I, too, sense the closure that Goldenlangur mentions, Joel. There's also a hint of longing lingering in this departure. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted September 21, 2009 Share Posted September 21, 2009 I agree with all of the above! a pleasure to read;-) DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted September 23, 2009 Share Posted September 23, 2009 Wonderful written and expressed one experience in a plain or it could be just a metaphor. In both cases the poem sounds wonderful and it has a good connection between the feelings. Good write Joel. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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