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The Only One Who Can See


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The Only One Who Can See

 

Everyone is blind he sd

Oh I agree but we can see

What he sd

 

The truth just rushing bye

I sd in the dark there is motion

Oh yes my mother in a carriage

following her father to Germany

where they wouldn't be killed

for owning land and a lime kiln

or my grandfather hiding alone

In the wood he was killed he sd

Without a doubt as was my mother

 

or the farmer because of Monsanto

dead is dead I sd

Hold onto that

What he sd

 

That I sd

I cant see it

But its right there I sd

Not for me he sd

Oh I sd an end is an end

Got it he sd.

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At first glance, this one comes across as a mosaic of contradictions -- he said we're blind, we agree we're blind, yet we see what he said -- and logic: there is motion in the dark, yet we don't see it. Perhaps we hear it, or even feel it.

 

In line with the logical suppositions, the second verse injects some hardcore proof into the mix:

 

I sd in the dark there is motion

Oh yes my mother in a carriage

following her father to Germany

where they wouldn't be killed

for owning land and a lime kiln

or my grandfather hiding alone

In the wood he was killed he sd

Without a doubt as was my mother ...

Acutely logical, this part's close to home for me. But the end is like a consensus to agree to disagree --

 

But its right there I sd

Not for me he sd

Oh I sd an end is an end

Got it he sd

... though everyone agrees on something.

 

I'm not quite sure what the reason is for the peculiar abbreviation "sd," but I think it works in this poem. It sets the poem's "flow" by giving it some kind of butterfly effect, making it seem like it's always morphing from one thing to the next. I liked "The Only One Who Can See" a lot, Juris.

 

Tony

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Hi Dr_C,

 

Like Tony, I also like the paradox in the poem and the part

 

Oh yes my mother in a carriage

following her father to Germany

where they wouldn't be killed

for owning land and a lime kiln

 

I can really resonate.

 

Another thoughtful poem. I leave with "He sd, I sd", " I can't see, but it is there" lingering in my mind...

 

Cheers,

 

Lake

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An interesting twist. the truth is rushing by, he sd and I sd are not what we saw, we can see.

the only one who can see doesn’t really see; no one is convinced, then we end with no end, like what tony sd, ‘ agree to disagree’.

 

more reads, more fun.

thanks dr_con for the post!

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