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Sparrows

 

Walking through the dusk,

I spotted a brown bird,

alone

amid tall grass,

calling hysterically

like a lost child,

and limping as it saw me

approaching.

I cupped it in my hands,

took it home, tended it with a few seeds,

some water and comforted it in a cage

hanging by the window.

 

Morning was awakened

by a swarm of sparrows swooping

around my house, bumping against

the glass-pane, chirping, shrieking

as if to break into the confinement

to rescue the prisoner.

With a bang, a small body,

from the collision with the window,

dropped,

and then, another,

another

That astounded me most of all.

I opened the door.

 

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Lake,

 

A surprising piece- beautiful in its simplicity and yet with a profound and direct message- Really lovely work- I felt the tension hurt and sudden freedom...

 

Very impressed!

 

 

DC&J

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I agree with Dr. Con's remarks about this piece, Lake. I'll also add that the poem's style reminds me of James Wright, who happens to be one of my favorite poets.

 

Tony

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Thank you Dr. Con, I like how you read it. I was afraid it might be too simple, but am glad you read something profound.

 

With appreciation.

 

Lake

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Hi Tony,

 

What can I say - I've been reading James Wright. But I'm still far away from his works. Lots to learn and I'm pleased that it reminds you of James Wright.

 

You have such an ability to recognize nuances in other's works.

 

Many thanks.

 

Lake

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lake, I like the way you split the lines. I'm not very sure of the word bang in the second part L7. Is it too heavy, too big for this small body? I may choose flop instead.

 

a lovely poem, keen in discernment.

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My cultural visual was Hitchcock's film, but either way nicely played out.

 

Personally I would have locked the door in the face of such an onslaught.

 

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Hi badger,

 

I havn't seen the film, I guess I have to find time to do that.

 

Probably, I should've written "I set the bird free". :)

 

 

Thanks,

 

Lake

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