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What is black magic

uh uh uh

liquid gold spillin' from a mother's stomach

uh uh uh uh

makes no nevermind just read those entrails

uh uh uh

Fella says to me without god's moral code

uh uh uh uh

I would surely do wrong

uh uh uh

I wouldn't hold back from taking the world

uh uh uh uh

killing my own children to feed my own need

uh uh uh

profit from someone else's back kissing the devil

uh uh uh uh

That's just plain wrong

uh uh uh

You do that old black magic every day you live

uh uh uh uh

hating them all because of what some book said

uh uh uh

Blinded by greed to the precious gift of this life

uh uh uh uh

pretending its ok to not take any blame

uh uh uh

responsibility belonging to god or those others

uh uh uh uh

Seeing the surface never the depth

uh uh uh

refusing to see the mess you've made of it all

uh uh uh uh

What black magic isn't is the light that shines

uh uh uh

cracking the mystery leaving only the Love

uh uh uh uh

only the love

uh uh uh

that runs through it all

uh uh uh uh - uh uh uh

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Interesting use of repetition, Juris. The poem itself reads like a scathing rebuke of organized religion. Well-expresed!

 

Tony

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Hi D_C, At first I saw the uh uh uh every other line and thought Huh? But I found the rhythm of this poem, punctuated by the chant like repetition the driving force of the poem. It put an exclamation point on each thought. I liked it.

 

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Thanks Tinker & Tony!

 

Imagine this as I perform it with a rattle in the background ;-)

 

Many thanks for your comments and insights!

 

J&DC

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goldenlangur

Hi DC,

 

I wondered if this is written in the rap beat and language? The mix of beautiful imagery with the violence in the tone is quite startling and effective:

 

liquid gold spillin' from a mother's stomach

 

 

I could be wrong but the reference to the reading of the entrails seems to be a reference from Vodoo or shamanic practices of divination.

 

How poignant then that the reading indicates greed and destruction.

 

 

Thank you.

 

 

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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