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Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

when your gone.

 

somewhere in the night.

i dream about you

when you are gone.

 

you are not by my side

when i sleep alone at night.

 

drifting apart

ever lonely

 

the tears streak down my face.

we used to whisper to one another

after making love.

 

now here in the dark

in my room all alone.

 

when you are gone

im so insecure.

 

i dream about you.

but like all dreams

they fade away

in the cold distance.

 

and everytime

i try to reconnect

 

we grow ever

so far apart.

 

is this love

i feel for you

worth it

on my end of the line.

 

when your gone

and you have left me

for good it seems time

is not on my side

 

drifting apart

in all eternity.

 

and when i am gone

you leave a flower

by my grave.

 

when we were young

you would of shed

a tear or two for me.

 

but now that many years

have passed us on by

since you left me

on a rainy day.

 

you hav no solace

or rememberance for me.

 

only a word

to your new family.

 

he was a friend

that stabbed me

in the back

and i wish for

those memories

of him were

nothing but youthful

ignorance.

 

and i look down from above

peace in my heart.

nice memories

but even i have moved on.

 

a lover waits for me

in another life

 

destiny waits for me.

and time passes on by

but it seems to be

only a second or two

to the powers that be.

 

and when it rains out

life renews itself

in a tear.

 

then a new journey begins.

the flowers bloom

and i meet you

on a windy day by the seaside

and i am at peace

forgetten my past.

it was only a dream.

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The mention of "cold" distance strikes a chord, Victor:

 

i dream about you.

but like all dreams

they fade away

in the cold distance ....

Distance -- literal and figurative -- works on several levels. It complements (and is amplified by) the sense of transcendence:

 

and i look down from above

peace in my heart.

nice memories

but even i have moved on ....

 

a lover waits for me

in another life ....

Mesmerizing and, at the same time, heart wrenching -- I enjoyed it.

 

Tony

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Expressive and direct. Personally I would find it difficult to have so many words in a poem, but then my style tends to edit down to the core.

 

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Aleksandra

How much I enjoyed this poem, Victor. Very emotional and heartbreaking. The metaphors are included in the right places and give it its real sense. That's what makes this poem beautiful and melancholic. I like the bright side, the positive.

 

I read this poem over and over. I loved it.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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goldenlangur

Hi victor,

 

Melancholy and full of yearning. It flows like a dirge and yet you also inject a sense of going beyond such heartache and suffering.

 

 

Beautiful!

 

Thank you.

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

wow everyone thanks for the rave reviews. pride sets in. i guess i am starting to find a rythm. my older poems i seemed so immature and knew nothing on the poetry world. thanks for the journey my friends. i have a title for my writings, poetry, short stories, journals and letters it is called " Silver Chords" my two nephews will inherit my writings. i blessed both at birth to be my godsons. since i miss there lifes now they will see i had a beautiful heart in my writings. i have made peace finally i will be departing earth soon. i have seven years left my guardian angel barthawlamuel says. i will be given a crown of glory for overcoming death. only christ moses elijah and enoch have done this besides me. may angels be with you and know i have love you as christ jesus has.

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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