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Dear Son

So you are having finance problems

You are out of your mind if you think

I am going to send dollars to piss away

I am certainly not going to give it

to someone like you

who has wasted

most of his life

doing little

or nothing

 

Why do we become poets

inheriting a view of self

barely watered down

from land law

 

Cattle thieves territory grabs and mine by force

The steady puritan gaze that denies the creaky

infrastructure of this bridge over life’s chasm

the yawning abyss which is always satisfied

 

I sicken myself

stolen images

broken dreams

The span sways

 

I can’t even remember the crime

That’s why we sit and compose

examine bones find them hollow

search emptiness and discover

 

Not a breath wasted

No remorse in love

All part of a piece

so much better

than before.

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Very interesting piece and yes, so much better than before. Wonderful expressions, wonderful points. I like this poem a lot, Juris. Interesting title also. Much enjoyed.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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'barely watered down' to describe one's poetic self is an interesting expression - to me that means the narrator has maintained his integrity. Nice one.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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I sometimes wonder whether the steady puritan gaze is the answer. It certainly has staying power.

 

I think the part that strikes me the most is this:

 

I can’t even remember the crime

I can't either!

 

But this one's the one that weighs heavily upon me:

 

Not a breath wasted

No remorse in love

All part of a piece

so much better

than before.

Too bad the only thing I never squandered is lines of verse.

 

A truly excellent composition, Juris. I think it's my new favorite of yours. Thanks for it.

 

Tony

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Hi DC,

 

You often juxtapose the measurable and the immeasurable, the material and the transcendental and I read the poem in this light.

 

In the first stanza, you have a parental/authority figure (almost classic Freudian father figure I read) calibrate the progeny's life, work and achievement and finds it wanting in material terms:

 

So you are having financial problems

...

who has wasted

most of his life

doing little

or nothing ...

 

The next stanza is a more reflective one in which the 'son' contemplates on the poetical creed and path and their place in the larger context of the trajectory of human endeavors:

 

... land law

 

Cattle thieves territory grabs and mine by force

 

I read this :

 

The steady puritan gaze that denies the creaky

infrastructure of this bridge over life’s chasm

 

as a reflection on the Puritan ethics of work in which more flighty things like poetry and artistic aspirations perhaps have little or no value and place.

 

The quandary with which the poet begins the reflections is not easily resolved. How haunting that he is left with this thought:

 

 

Not a breath wasted

No remorse in love

 

Even if I got your intent wrong, I enjoyed the thoughts you provoke in this poem.

 

 

Thank you.

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Tony, you are generous as always- and many, many thanks!

GL- you always see to the heart of the piece, not blinded by my poor obfuscations- Thank You!

 

Really wondrous friends,

 

Juris

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