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Silence


JoelJosol

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Silence---

 

 

surrounds

me,

 

irritating

 

your inability

to fill in

 

 

between

 

 

the sound

 

from lips

that wish to open

 

up,

 

to send v i br a t ion s,

and jar

 

 

the shield

of

 

yellow

light

 

where I

am,

 

a coffee-table

book,

 

closed.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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goldenlangur

Hi JoelJosol,

 

The way you've formatted this poem is quite eye-catching. One gets a sense of cold shouldering and refusal to talk - a silence more deafening than a screaming, shouting battle of words.

 

 

It is well written,

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Aleksandra

Interesting Joel. Well captured poem. The end shows the deepness of this poem

 

Interesting for eyes too.

 

Well done.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

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I agree with the others, Joel. This poem has an attractive and effective layout. I enjoyed this part a lot:

the sound

 

from lips

that wish to open

 

up,

 

to send v i br a t ion s

... and the coffee table book metaphor is fresh.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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I'm glad the layout worked for you, Aleksandra and Tony.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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