tonyv Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 There are cracks in the plaster above the door; this building has settled. For two days, we shared a sun too impossible to ignore. Our secrets were hidden on bookshelves, and we were distracted, forgot they were there. I call you, but there is no answer -- March is here. Goodnight, sweetness ... I don’t have rain. Only the cold, only the snowplows rumbling by. Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 Hi Tony, In recent weeks your work seems to have taken a darker, more melancholy but superbly nuanced tone. This poem is an excellent example of this. Brooding and laden with images which show but don't tell and let the read see, imagine and read a whole range of possible scenarios. But the underlying wistfulness and yearning come through with impact. How desolate "spring" seems to the narrator - its arrival heralding no change for his inner turmoil: tonyv wrote: I call you, but there is no answer -- March is here. Goodnight, sweetness ... I dont have rain. Only the cold, only the snowplows rumbling by. The image of the last line is haunting... goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 Tony, you are mastering this melancholy thing very well with those powerful imageries. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 12, 2009 Author Share Posted May 12, 2009 Hi Golden, Thank you very much for your kind words and observations. I'm especially pleased that you liked the image at the end of the poem; I like that one, too. Unfortunately, there is no new voice. This is just more of the same old Tony. I haven't written anything new for awhile -- I can't really say it's writer's block, because I could use the prompts for inspiration (I guess I've just been busy i.e. haven't put in the time to write ) -- so I decided to recycle a couple of old ones. This one's from March of last year. I posted it then on PC. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 12, 2009 Author Share Posted May 12, 2009 Thank you, Joel, for your kind comment re the images! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 Ah yes I remembered on this one. Tony, this poem I loved. The deep emotions in this poem captures. This part I loved: For two days, we shared a suntoo impossible to ignore. Our secrets were hidden on bookshelves, That part shows some short passion what happened in the past, and you expressed wonderful. It sounds so poetical and lovely. Yes the melancholy is present in this poem. The poetical touches are all around this poem Tony. I call you, but there is no answer-- March is here. Goodnight, sweetness ... I dont have rain. Only the cold, That part is deep and so lovely. Sounds so soft and the peace is that what I feel in that part, what makes the good end. Very well done Tony. This poem I loved Thank you for sharing this " Spring " poem in this early spring BW it is March ALeksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 I came again on this march poem Tony I really like it. Just I was reading one more time Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pawn shop Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 No answer ! Wha Da ??!! I love the bookshelf line...... what's on your bookshelf Tony..... I'd like to know at least 15 books..... cute poem......a touch sad....but mostly cute Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 Hi Tony, Usually I find the short lined poems have a past tempo, but this one slows me down in reading. A melancholy melody. A winter mind in spring. Thanks for recycling, Lake Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 12, 2009 Author Share Posted May 12, 2009 No answer ! Wha Da ??!!I love the bookshelf line...... what's on your bookshelf Tony..... I'd like to know at least 15 books..... cute poem......a touch sad....but mostly cute Ah, Jonathan, I could probably list at least 15 subjects like transportation (e.g. automobiles, railroads, ships), poetry, law, chess, Americana, politics, history, and so forth! But the secrets themselves ... well, they could be hidden in plain sight or tucked away between the pages of the books. Thank you for your kind comment! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 12, 2009 Author Share Posted May 12, 2009 Hi Tony, Usually I find the short lined poems have a past tempo, but this one slows me down in reading. A melancholy melody. A winter mind in spring. Thanks for recycling, Lake Thank you, Lake, for your thoughtful comment! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 12, 2009 Author Share Posted May 12, 2009 Thank you, Aleksandra, for taking a close look at this poem. I like the end, too! I remember when you replied to this one back on PC. I saved the thread, and I sometimes go back and re-read your words; they make me happy. Tonyy Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 Hi Tony, Well I don't remember this and I am glad you reposted it, because I loved it. A brief encounter with a lasting impact, sping in winter, winter in spring. So beautiful and so sad. Very nicely written Tony. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 12, 2009 Author Share Posted May 12, 2009 Hi Tony, Well I don't remember this and I am glad you reposted it, because I loved it. A brief encounter with a lasting impact, sping in winter, winter in spring. So beautiful and so sad. Very nicely written Tony. ~~Tink Thank you, Tinker! I love your observation about winter/spring ... Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
summayya Posted May 12, 2009 Share Posted May 12, 2009 I remember this one! I really enjoyed reading it then and I love it now! Wondeful imagery and and amazing last line image! Waiting for more good poetry.... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 12, 2009 Author Share Posted May 12, 2009 Thank you, Summayya! I'll try ... Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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