pawn shop Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 I couldn't believe it after Ashley told me but it turned out to be true Laura shaved her head all her long blonde hair gone now just 21 year old stubble rubbed the top of her head and said, " starting from scratch again ? " she smiled and asked if I had any extra smokes I gave her 4 she was breathing hard and flustered because her on again off again boyfriend was throwing a teenage temper tantrum swearing and being idiotic at everyone and anyone in his vicinity a week later he shaved his head and he had black long hair now stubble (is he scratching with his middle finger) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 How evasive poem this time Jonathan. But the first imagery what I got is sad and very often seen. Like some two abandoned persons, diving in some bad river from where is no coming back. And then catastrophic and tragics end for both of them. I am sorry if I interpreted this poem wrong, it could be with different meaning, just I got it like this. I like it how is written it has some strong point of view Thank you for sharing. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 this made me laugh at how we look at life. keep writing. this was very witty in my opinion carlo. larsen aka victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 I'm enjoying your new style a lot, Jonathan. Never a dull moment! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 I guess even girls go for skin-head now for spite :-) Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 13, 2009 Share Posted May 13, 2009 Hi pawnshop, A great narrative here. The "on again off again" relationship between Ashley and her boyfriend and the drastic action they both take, suggest emotional upheaval and battles. This stormy relationship comes alive in your low keyed narrative voice. I enjoyed this. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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