dr_con Posted April 1, 2012 Share Posted April 1, 2012 Random Chance I was enthralled with a friend’s friend’s tale of watching a movie 21 times and then meeting his equivalent heading back to the UK and no worries about orderly queues or other straight lines hopped on a plane followed her home And met her boyfriend Lost in England without a clue re-evaluating his structure wanting to be normal not touched by the divine shaken and mourned A story from a long time ago harder to do these days but I don’t deserve second best in my own life None of us do Rather we want to explode take charge of our humble service uniquely manifest read clearly concisely pure of the deeds we have done what we have added to the experience of the One not left lost alone desperate But will find the missing word written on heaven’s scroll our contract writ in blood bone breath on what it means to be human. Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted April 1, 2012 Share Posted April 1, 2012 amazing write DC. the middle stanzas solid imo. the last stanza heart hitting. well done indeed, one of your best writes methinks. victor aka larsen Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted April 1, 2012 Author Share Posted April 1, 2012 Thanks Victor! Glad it worked for you;-) Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted April 1, 2012 Share Posted April 1, 2012 hi doc, if I may: the title and opening lines threw me off. My only other note is the "___" in the final stanza. In every other way this piece grabs me where I breathe and think and feel. Nice work - David Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted April 7, 2012 Author Share Posted April 7, 2012 Thanks David- Changed the stumbles a little;-) Appreciate the read and feedback... J&DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted April 7, 2012 Share Posted April 7, 2012 I'm sure in a parallel universe all ambitions are fufilled and not humbled Well it's some sort of consolation illuminating Dr.C badge :0) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted April 9, 2012 Share Posted April 9, 2012 An unusual presentation that works on different levels. Could almost have been written by a flight attendant/crew member. “Heading back to the UK and no worries about orderly queues or other straight lines” made me smile. The overall impression I'm left with though, is that chance and practicality have a certain balance/relationship and that some questions perhaps are destined only to be answered after death. Benjamin Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted April 13, 2012 Share Posted April 13, 2012 Pure/of the deeds we have done a stark reminder that in the end, it matters not what we have, but what we have done. It all comes down to our actions, accountability. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted April 13, 2012 Author Share Posted April 13, 2012 Badger, Tony, Benjamin- Thanks you all very much for indulging my poor verse- And I believe you all read it just right;-) Thanks!Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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