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An Oxfam shop assistant spills

his expensive bottled water as

he texts. A Mother, vegan, pagan

goes through the pockets of a

coat that originated from Next-

her daughter shakes a snow globe

and the square outside is adorned

with a white robe. A traffic warden is|

indecisive about the purchase of

a book on existentialism. The mother

buys an electric moon clock and the

snow globe. In the square a salvation

army band plays and the daughter

demands a hot dog-as snow flakes collide

with musical notes-she gives her hot dog

to the tramp whose beard sways in the wind-

is it the music or a small gesture that

makes a hobo cry. A clock glows in a

child's bedroom- sleeping beneath the

moon a tramps hums a melody because

he knows he isn't alone.

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David W. Parsley

Nice theme and touching symbol, Barry. Appropriate to the season.

 

- Dave

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Great enjambment - I envy. Also, VERY clear images.

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The snakes and ladders of fortune are all too apparent these days when 'snakes' seem to be multiplying faster than traffic cones. The 'traffic warden' and 'indecisive' in the same sentence as 'a book on existentialism' was a wry touch. Your overall imagery is meaningful and not just related to the season. B.

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I loved the surprising shift from apparent consumerism to unexpected charity. The child, mother, and street person connected and are now bonded on a universal level. Nice work, Barry.

 

Tony

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