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Go boy! (New edited version, as opposed to drunken 1st draft!)


douglas

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Oh listen to you!

 

Trying so hard to impress me with

With your very drunken philosophies

 

And just when I thought you were starting to make sense

I realised that

It was time to dispense

With these benign social pleasantries

 

In fact

As much as I respect your right to an opinion

I must confess feeling extreme duress

As you began to express

And claim verbal dominion

Over me, more or less

 

And I thought to myself

 

It’s time he got over his hang-ups

And over himself

By no longer denying his passions

And placing them on the shelf

 

What’s the use of repressing one’s desires

By putting out the fires

Of what one feels?

 

So don’t be a fool

And ignore what comes so naturally to you

 

Perhaps you’re a bore

Precisely because you abhor

The authentic personality that lies within

 

And I can tell you that it’s no sin

To live an honest life

Rather than to lie and deny

And break your own heart

By savagely and cruelly ripping it apart

 

It seems a huge shame to me

That you've let your entire family

Define who you are

By telling you who you're meant to be

 

So what I suggest

Is a lot less self-pity

And a nice big dose of mental agility

 

Get out of the corner you find yourself in

And celebrate your life

Because it’s no sin

To love someone even if

Society makes it a joke

(And anyway,

Their impositions are like a cattle yoke

So don’t listen to what they say)

 

And leave all of your whining and doubts behind

And instead of bashing yourself

Learn to be kind

 

Embrace who you are with full certainty

And soon you’ll discover what it’s like

To feel free!

To receive love, you have to give it...

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Hi Douglas, Great advise and well said for anyone regardless of what fears they face. The world can't accept you if you can't accept you.

 

You might want to look at L4 "starting to making sense"... I wonder if you meant to put "starting to make sense". Or is it my American English?

 

I liked this piece. ~~Tink

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What struck me is that the speaker sees the big picture; he seems to be coming from a position of experience. He's ready to pass on what he has learned and reacts with compassion rather than indignation.

 

Tony

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

wow douglas you are a gifted writer. this was a treasure to read filled with great insight,

 

victor

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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And I can tell you that it’s no sin

To live an honest life

Bravo.

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Many relevent phrases and passages: Love is where you find it. Benjamin

 

"What’s the use of repressing one’s desires

By putting out the fires

Of what one feels?"

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Thank you all so very much for your lovely comments and feedback.

And thanks Tinker for pointing out my typo!!! I have amended it.

To receive love, you have to give it...

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