dansalinger Posted March 31, 2013 Share Posted March 31, 2013 We got in the car and took off for a drive and in a couple hours we finally arrive from the central valley, all the way to the coast to that quaint little town, of which I often boast the sun excites your skin as it burns away the blues the update on your Facebook says it came from Santa Cruz a place is so laid back that you just start to melt takes the sting off the wounds from the hands that you’ve been dealt there becomes a gentle calm when you’re sitting near the ocean enchanted by the salty breeze baste in seaweed soup and suntan lotion the Boardwalk beckons with its bustling park it’s beach front concerts playing after the dark memories start flowing from my inglorious youth a window to the past blurred by fantasy and truth late night beach bond-fires-- with coolers of beer the stars put on a show as breakers crash in your ear on big laid out blankets we explored our desire and then traded tall tales over the crackling fire long summer days baking out in the sun where the golden tattoo adorned everyone football, swimming or exploring the cliffs wine coolers, egg rolls and Bob Marley riffs sitting on a bench as my kids play in the sand I felt an angel’s tear gently fall on my hand the sky covered over and the air became cold I can’t figure out when that boy got so old as we loaded the car and buckled ourselves in my eyes filled with tears and I started to grin Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted April 1, 2013 Share Posted April 1, 2013 very beautiful quality to this Dan. i loved the ending. get misty eyed happens to me all the time and i usually grin too. i get a day dream feeling off of this but at the same time this feels like real events. enjoyed this immesley. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted April 3, 2013 Share Posted April 3, 2013 Hi Dan, I love the sentiment of the poem and the reference to Facebook gives it a current touch. I think the story evolves fluently but the rhymed couplets seem to chop it up a little for me. I wonder if you retained the rhyme but tried different line breaks... Just an idea. I enjoyed this revisit to Santa Cruz, been there many times.... Spring Break baby... That is where we went OOOOOOh so many decades ago. ~~Tink. Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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