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Like the sweetness of the beloved,

morning passed by; blushing the day.

--For once

----------------life burst into a rose;

 

all orders slavishly

dropped at its feet.

 

Now again

night, glaringly, descends from the crisscross of a million stars

----------------------------------------and settles on our dreams.

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

hi summayyah lovely imagery. very original line.

 

life burst into a rose

 

i like it!

 

victor

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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goldenlangur

Hi summayya,

 

 

Such lush lyrical imageries flow beautifully to that magical final line:

 

summayya wrote:

...

Now again

night, glaringly, descends from the crisscross of a million stars

and settles on our dreams.

 

 

Truly lovely!

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Aleksandra

Very beautiful sound of poem Summ. This one is wonderful. I think this poem had some different writing way that I used to read by you. And no doubts - it's amazing, as goldenlangur said - lyrical imageries and I loved this poem

 

Thank you for sharing

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

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thanks for your good words vic, gl ,alek, and Pawnshop. I am glad you guys enjoyed this poem.

 

Really great to see you back pawnshop! You were missed.

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Oooooo Summayya, This is yummy. "slavishly" yummy.

 

Well I had to say something and who can beat "lyrical imagery" or "sexy"? Both of which are true.

 

I think you should enter this in the contest thread at the Connection. You'd get a 10 from me.

 

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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This is a perfect poem, Summayya. Not too long, not too short -- it's simply an enchanting lyric that's definitely amongst your best.

 

The sweetness of the beloved, though lovely, has a hint of sadness, for it is fleeting ... like the morning. Nevertheless, life burst into a rose.

 

The poem never loses its verve. It keeps the reader in a trancelike state, and the crisscross of a million stars from which night descends administers a dose of euphoria. I wish I wrote this one.

 

Tony

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In a word, life is beautiful. Perhaps, when I was confirmed about my first love (actually I scored a good result in secondary school exam, and specially in physics and maths, I fall in love into these), I thought this way!

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