Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 Baby, Come Back... The day we first dated was the day I fell in love with you. I was head over heels for you. I loved the way you moved, your hair, and the complexion of your skin. There was something about you in everything you do. Please come back. I was wrong and you were right. I remember the days we touched and made love to mellow rock and country music. Oh, how the beat seemed to go on but that was all just a fantasy. The rain fell many days after are relationship ended. After all that was said and done, I realized it was all for the best. The day we married, we danced up a storm. On our honey moon we made love on the beach. Your naked body in the ocean made me so aroused. We did some site seeing in Naples and Fort Myers Florida. We had dreams of buying a condo on the beach. We both worked hard but an accident would turn our dreams into dust. Oh, how I wished I could turn back the hands of time and relive a moment in my life over again. I would have treated you right after I broke my neck and became paralyzed. But, you wanted a lover in bed more than a lover of who you are. Oh, how could I have been so wrong. I pray to god, saying softly in my prayers baby, come back we can blame it all on God. It just wasn’t meant to be. I write poetry, you are in many of my poems, but, you are unnamed. I can dream about you so please baby come back there was something in everything about you. Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 Dear Victor. This is very nice poem with interesting sense. I mean how it goes the tone here. The poem is written in simple way, with directly easy words, clear imageries and expressions. And most of the time that kind of poems, written like that, are taking some not attractive tone. But here in this poem, there is much sense of all what is written and what the poem expressed. I felt that sad sound of this poem, what is used in many poems from yours. Slowly, line by line , the poem makes a good sad composition, nostalgic, but somewhere it can be seen some peace too. I don't know , but I felt, and that is not usual peace in some sad and poem what hurts. Thanks for sharing, Vic. I am glad to read from you Alek Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 Hi Victor, I like this kind of directness: Larsen M. Callirhoe wrote: I loved the way you moved, your hair, and the complexion of your skin ... and the local references: We did some site seeing in Naples and Fort Myers Florida. We had dreams of buying a condo on the beach. And while I can relate to this part, when it comes to many of my own poems -- I write poetry, you are in many of my poems, but, you are unnamed, I always seem to find myself saying something along these lines, too: Please come back. I was wrong and you were right. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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