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the experiment of man


Benjamin

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pantheons of imagination

locked in ratchet windings

of an ancient clock..

a pause..

before the gong

bursts forth..

adjusting chronometry

of their drudgery

 

and through a fog

of halitosis

and drink fumes..

lost aspirations

 

the definition of love

a resolve

to keep one's word

morality

the only thing

that makes human life

worth living

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...morality...

 

Pulling no punches, huh? The "lost aspirations" part can also hit home, I am sure, to many thinking folks.

 

Loved the use of the word chronometry.

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I love the last stanza giving a moral philosophy of life. Your use of "adjusting chronometry" seems oblique to me. May I suggest "measuring chronometry" ??? As always, introspective and related to reality of life.

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Thanks guys.

Seeking a universal tone here... I wrestled with "adjust" and will take another look. My intention was to emphasise a boundless (historical) and intangible mentality, geared to short, physical and Earthbound lives. Perhaps... "When ambition exceeds ability the likelihood of success is limited." :biggrin:

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Morals have to come from somewhere. Perhaps all people, even primitives in a tribe that has never been in contact with anyone else in the world, have an innate sense of right and wrong. If so, how and why? Well, that would be an argument with many sides, but I would suggest instilled by God.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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