douglas Posted August 3, 2014 Share Posted August 3, 2014 Missing you The morning church bells ringing across the city The low cold clouds Soft light And silver winter air The bells have stopped And now the birds are singing their songs Dancing from branch to branch together Oblivious and joyful I envy them As I exhale a languid plume of ghostly breath Quietly acquiescing to The prospect of yet another day Without you Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted August 3, 2014 Share Posted August 3, 2014 Hi Douglas, it could almost be taken for a mis-spelling, but I really like the originality of the birds "signing" their songs, accentuating their obliviousness to the narrator's helpless sense of abandonment. This subtle treatment would seem to render the line, "oblivious and joyful" to be unnecessary. Thank You, - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted August 3, 2014 Author Share Posted August 3, 2014 It is indeed a spelling error! Lol. Have fixed it. Thanks Dave. Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted September 29, 2014 Share Posted September 29, 2014 I like this a lot, Douglas. The mood is everything. Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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