Lake Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 (Encouraged by Golden) 1 gray skies croaking ravens darken the backyard 2 winter sun brighter than summer spring in icicle drops 3 piercing wind on my window sills dried boxelder bugs 4 in the stillness winding up the hill unknown footprints 5 after the girl left a feeling of loss creeps in 6 cold night, in the humming of the furnace garage doors screech 7 in the darkness computer screen blinks with twinkling stars 8 winter morning the car’s headlight - the first light of daybreak 9 missing the stop sign missing the stop police car’s behind 10 record low- this cold even in my bosom (Hope there's one that works. ) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 Hello Lake, You've got an impressive collection of haiku here with wonderful images. Love the contrasts in the 'gray skies' and the 'ravens' in the first haiku. Similarly the final image in No. 3 is quite startling. My favourites are Nos. 4, 7. 8 and the haunting 10. Thank you for an inspirational read. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 1,2,7, are definitely my favorite in this collection of yours Lake. Very good job, and wonderful effort. All haikus have its own story, and I like them all. Well done Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 Hi again Lake, Your wonderful collection of haiku and your recent thoughts about the 'turn' in this form and its challenges gave me an idea - perhaps we could try a haiku exercise roughly like this : For a whole week we try to write a collection of haiku which includes the reference November or autumn eg: after the rain crows fly in a line - November dusk Perhaps we call it a haiku challenge? What do you think? goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 oh wow lake love the imagery in your series of haikus. this one is my favorite number seven but i enjoyed them all. number seven was perfect at capturing this series truth and elogance. larsen Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted May 19, 2009 Author Share Posted May 19, 2009 Thanks Golden, Alex and Larsen for your picks. Much appreciated. Lake Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted May 19, 2009 Author Share Posted May 19, 2009 goldenlangur wrote: perhaps we could try a haiku exercise roughly like this : For a whole week we try to write a collection of haiku which includes the reference November or autumn eg: after the rain crows fly in a line - November dusk Perhaps we call it a haiku challenge? What do you think? That'll be a great idea! Each time, we'll have a different theme to write about. But you have to make a start so that others can follow. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 My favorite winter sun brighter than summer spring in icicle drops Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 I remember this series of haiku, Lake. Winter imagery is my favorite of all -- perfect title, btw! -- and the imagery you employ, along with its logical progression, is sublime. I wish I wrote this one. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 Hello again Lake, Lake wrote: That'll be a great idea! Each time, we'll have a different theme to write about. But you have to make a start so that others can follow. So glad the idea appealed to you - inspired by your own haiku in the forum and so let's try it. I will start it as a new topic and we can all post our haiku collection for the week - 16 - 23 November on this thread and of course comment and exchange ideas and thoughts. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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