Frank E Gibbard Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 I wrote this line at my terminal peril A siren drew me to this chick Beryl Though I knew no girl of that name It was her or Cheryl either‘s the same The jigsaw piece dovetailed so fittingly The need in me to rhyme unwittingly A fix in time for my words for to dance My compulsion suaged by concordance I am done literarily with the belle Beryl Purpose fulfilled now bury her I will Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 Did you take advantage of the ONLINE RHYMING DICTIONARY when you wrote this one, Frank? The jigsaw piece dovetailed so fittingly The need in me to rhyme unwittingly But seriously, though you use the word literarily, it could easily be misread as literally, and hence the end seems sinister: I am done literarily with the belle Beryl Purpose fulfilled now bury her I will Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 Hello Frank, Your rhymes flow with such ease and like Tony I too sensed an underlying hint of the macabre. Wondered, perhaps wrongly if this alludes in any way to the recent mercy killing stories in the BBC news. You show how easily life can be dispensed, figuratively of course, but even so: Frank E Gibbard wrote: I wrote this line at my terminal peril .... My compulsion suaged by concordance I am done literarily with the belle Beryl Purpose fulfilled now bury her I will goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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