Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 Under The Stars I hold you my love in my arms tightly under the nighttime sky. I wish for a shooting star to make our dreams come true. Many of the vast stars in the heaven above twinkle on us this evening by the ocean shoreline. We dance in the water as the tides come crashing in and out to sea. I make love to Elizabeth in the ocean on South Beach Miami Florida. Half naked female models watch us have intercourse in the salty water Neither of us mind the models watching us make love in the ocean. For now this is a dream but one day it will become reality under the stars. Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 . Victor I love this poem. How romantic and passionate. It has very nice imageries. Even you gave more precise detail " on South Beach Miami Florida " and the imagery works more powerful. .The passion is at the top what gives nice feeling, and also I think gives a hope, like you say in the last lines: " For now this is a dream but one day it will become reality under the stars ". Definitely it's worth to wait Much enjoyed with this poem. I love to read these poems of yours Vic. Sensitive, romantic, not so sad, like the other ones. Wonderful Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 I, too, liked the local reference, Victor, and how the models watched your activity, but you didn't mind. As always, I liked the shift from dream to reality. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 A nice portrait of the shift from dream to real, and a hot somnolesence... DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Hi vic, Always there's this immense longing in your poems and how vividly you capture the consummation of love. The night sky and the ocean and stars all reflect this rapturous celebration of passion. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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