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Tinker

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Here are a few of my attempts at the American Sentence.
#1AS
White-haired man in grey tailored suit touches my cold fingers with warm hands.
#2AS
No moon to dull their sparkle, stars sweep Northern sky. Midnight from my deck.
#3AS
Crystal water soothes my prickly throat; clear plastic serves up thirst quencher.
#4AS
Smell of Lavender clings to my fingers, reminds me of my grandma.

                                                                                        ~~Judi Van Gorder
I've known about this form for some time but finally got around to adding it to the Reference Section.  Badger's latest publication made me think of it.

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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White-haired man in grey tailored suit touches my cold fingers with warm hands.

 

Interesting Tink. I wasn't sure what the grey signified?

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 :rolleyes: Grey was simply the color of his suit.  The situation was serious but not black and actually I was expecting a white coat which is why the color was mentioned at all.  

I found that this form leaves me wanting to say more.  As in the #4 I wanted to fit in "From the garden, the smell of Lavender clings to my fingers but it is the connection to my grandmother that conjures the emotion.  Rosemary also clings to my clothes after walking in the garden.  I love those scents.

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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