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Jay O'Toole

Is there a love of meter fine

that helps the tongue to walk?

I love to share this love of mine

and pleasantly to talk.

 

'Tis true I-amb in metric form,

when write this lilting way.

The words be few or verbose storm

when much I have to say.

 

Would thank thee much for reading this

short ditty quickly writ

For poetry's the land of Bliss,

when words are quick of wit.

 

by Jay O'Toole

on June 27th, 2017

 

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Wow, Welcome Jay,  Nice intro.  This made me smile.   I've actually been working unsuccessfully on a poem about the rhythm of speech that has been tickling the back of mind for some time.  And here comes you with this delightful piece  .... I amb so happy to see  you here and love your first offering.   Looking forward to reading more.

~~Tink :rolleyes: 

 

 

 

 

 

 

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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Jay O'Toole

Thanks, Tink!  Great encouragement!  I love to have fun with my poetry, when & where I can.  It's nice to see that you caught the "I amb" part.

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Well, I happen to a fan of iambic meter, and the iambic meter in your ballad stanzas is impeccable. I remember reading in one of my books that James Wright (a personal favorite) and his contemporaries would have entire conversations in iambic pentameter. English being predominantly iambic it was that easy for them to volley iambic pentameters back and forth, more difficult to stray.

Welcome to the forum. I'm pleased you made your way here.

 

Tony :happy:

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Jay O'Toole

I agree, Tony.  I have created threads like that on other websites.  All responses had to be metered and rhyming.  It was great fun!

My English Literature teacher in high school (as I recall) said this.  "If you find a poetic form that fits your personality, then you can write a poem as easily as you can write a friendly letter."  I have found this to be true.  Thank you for the complimentary response.  Glad to be here.

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David W. Parsley

Include me with the welcomers, O'Toole.

And may iambic lines refresh the school

of memories that swim like darting sparks

to lead us back to speak in rhyme-words full

of whispers like soft gusts from childhood parks.

 - Dave

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Jay O'Toole

Excellent!  Thank you so much, David!  :smile:

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On 7/9/2017 at 3:50 PM, David W. Parsley said:

Include me with the welcomers, O'Toole.

And may iambic lines refresh the school

of memories that swim like darting sparks

to lead us back to speak in rhyme-words full

of whispers like soft gusts from childhood parks.

 - Dave

Dave, if forum posts had a "like" button I'd click it for your reply!

Tony:happy:

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Jay O'Toole

I agree, Tony.  I should have mentioned the iambic meter of Dave’s response.  I noticed it as well.  

 

Nice touch, Dave!

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Michael Burton

I have a soft spot for the verb "lilt." I think its sound is rather descriptive. So, it was nice to see you use it in this work!

 

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Jay O'Toole

Thanks, Michael!  It is a fun word.  Thanks for the encouraging comment. 

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