Jump to content
Poetry Magnum Opus

Ukraina Hotel


Recommended Posts

Fresh Federation snow on the hoods, trunks,
and window glass of cars in a half-filled lot.
Her legs, with the bass between and kick-drum on
the beats, took me a long, hard way from pravda.
The inside of her Volvo was still warm.

_____________
IMAGE

 

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

Link to post
Share on other sites

I like the sonics of this poem, the mood it creates, and the sudden shift of setting.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

Link to post
Share on other sites
goldenlangur

Hi Tony,

 

Seduction, hopes of a union (Federation) and disillusionment is what comes across. I could be wrong but it seems that your poem turns on the Slavic (?) word "Pravda" meaning a "higher truth" or "justice". The allusion to the "Volvo", a Swedish company taken over by Ford, an American company, seems to suggest a blurring of boundaries ?

 

Wonderful sonority and enjambment in your poem. Of course my muddled reading takes nothing away from your brilliant work.

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

Link to post
Share on other sites
Aleksandra

Hello Tony. I really can't catch your style of writing icon_smile.gif You seems lost looking for your way of writing. icon_razz.gif You are writing so differently , different styles . This poems seems so different by that what I have read from you.

 

This interesting poem, confused me and surprised me :). When I looked at first in the title I start to wonder, how you got inspiration for to write about Ukraina :). After all this poem sounds to me passionate - erotic? icon_smile.gif

Yes Pravda I understood what means because we use the same word for justice, truth. Volvo I know the cars, but in here, is Volvo mean Volvo - the car? icon_cyclops.gif

 

icon_biggrin.png

Your poem looks like a journey. I saw the photo of Ukraina Hotel in Moscow. Looks wonderful.

 

Thank you for sharing this poem and welcome back icon_smile.gif out of your bad writer's block icon_razz.gif

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

Link to post
Share on other sites

the whole five lines are moving and sounds an excitement of joyful feelings drumming in my mind.

 

 

so what should i say-----another tonyv production or another immortal impression?

Link to post
Share on other sites
I like the sonics of this poem, the mood it creates, and the sudden shift of setting.

 

Thanks Joel! I was experimenting with the beat, and I'm especially glad you took note of it. I'm glad you liked the mood, too.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

Link to post
Share on other sites
Hi Tony,

 

Seduction, hopes of a union (Federation) and disillusionment is what comes across. I could be wrong but it seems that your poem turns on the Slavic (?) word "Pravda" meaning a "higher truth" or "justice". The allusion to the "Volvo", a Swedish company taken over by Ford, an American company, seems to suggest a blurring of boundaries ?

 

Wonderful sonority and enjambment in your poem. Of course my muddled reading takes nothing away from your brilliant work.

 

goldenlangur

 

Wow, Golden! I love your take on "Federation." I was actually simply referring to the Russian Federation, and I had not caught the double meaning when I wrote the poem.

 

The blurring of boundaries is a key aspect, and I'm pleased that the use of Volvo amplifies the effect. That, too, just happens to be a stroke of luck, since I consciously missed the connection when I wrote the poem.

 

And seduction accompanied by disillusionment perfectly sums up the reference to "pravda," or truth. Pravda is also the name of a nightclub in Boston, and it could very well be the name of a nightclub within a hotel anywhere, but that's an allusion I wouldn't expect anyone to catch.

 

Thanks also for your kind compliment on the sonority. I'm pleased with the way this poem came across.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

Link to post
Share on other sites

Hello Alekk icon_smile.gif ,

Quote
aleksandra wrote:

 

This interesting poem, confused me and surprised me :).

I like that it did that!

 

Quote
aleksandra wrote:

 

When I looked at first in the title I start to wonder, how you got inspiration for to write about Ukraina :). After all this poem sounds to me passionate - erotic? icon_smile.gif

Hey, don't forget that I speak Estonian, and Ukraina is also the word for the Ukraine in that language. icon_razz.gif And I have to admit that, to me also, the poem has an erotic undercurrent. icon_rolleyes.gif

 

Quote
aleksandra wrote:

 

Yes Pravda I understood what means because we use the same word for justice, truth.

I am certainly aware of the similarities between Macedonian and Russian (both being Slavic languages), so I am only mildly surprised that pravda is the same in both.

 

Quote
aleksandra wrote:

 

Volvo I know the cars, but in here, is Volvo mean Volvo - the car? icon_cyclops.gif

Da, Sandre, Volvo is the car, despite what else it could sound like. icon_wink.gif

 

Quote
aleksandra wrote:

 

Your poem looks like a journey. I saw the photo of Ukraina Hotel in Moscow. Looks wonderful.

 

Thank you for sharing this poem and welcome back icon_smile.gif out of your bad writer's block icon_razz.gif

I promised to share with you the image that inspired this poem, Alek. I tried hard to find it on Google Image (where I originally saw it) but could not. Luckily, I had saved it to my hard drive, so here it is. (I have no idea who took the photo.) --

 

4yZ6DA.jpg

 

And thanks for your kind welcome back from the writer's block!

 

Tony icon_smile.gif

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

Link to post
Share on other sites
Refreshingly cool....like a WHITE RUSSIAN drink at a bar....with this New England weather.

 

Thanks, Pawnshop! Yea, it's certainly been hot here in the northeast. icon_sunny.png

 

But I see you prefer the stronger White Russian ... I myself would probably stick with the more-girly kahlua sombrero -- those probably go down easy all night long! icon_lol.gif

 

Nice to see you!

 

Tony icon_smile.gif

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

Link to post
Share on other sites
the whole five lines are moving and sounds an excitement of joyful feelings drumming in my mind.

 

 

so what should i say-----another tonyv production or another immortal impression?

 

I'm excited by your words, and I'm glad you liked this poem! One thing's for sure, it's certainly no Cecil B. DeMille production ... But I kind of like "tonyv production"! icon_lol.gif

 

Nice to see you again, Bloodyday!

 

Tony icon_smile.gif

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

Link to post
Share on other sites
tonyv wrote:

 

Fresh, Federation snow on the hoods, trunks,

and window glass of cars in a half-filled lot --

her legs (with the bass between and kick-drum on

the beats) took me a long, hard way from Pravda;

the inside of her Volvo was still warm.

 

I really really like this!

Im calling it a "Hot Damn!" poem- as in the expression, "Hot Damn, thats good!" *best spoken with cowboy drawl*

 

I was led here by the teasing Tony was giving Alek on another thread, about this poem being one of Alek's favs (or not...) there was some jabbing and some defending going on there (tease tease tease) and so I just had to come and see...

 

ok, so I do have to say- Im mostly getting innuendo and an erotic spiceiness from this- but, you know- guy to guy Tony, THATs whats so cool about it...

 

the way I see it, you pulled of a great bit of eroticism without any slime- and that is just really good stuff to pull off... >>>In my Humble opinion, that is<<<

 

Im inspired to see if I can try the same

 

(again, appologies if this is not anywhere in your original intent - but I am freely admitting my reading of it this way- and my admiration for the work)

Link to post
Share on other sites

I like it! icon_biggrin.png Thank you, Rumisong for resurrecting Ukraina Hotel. I think it's better than my more recent stuff.

 

Your read of it is right there. In line with what you are saying, I was trying to capture a nightclub environment, where anything can happen --

In trance music the bass falls between the beat (one &), while the kick drum falls on the beat. (from Wikipedia)

-- and I'm glad it came across as tastefully done.

 

Alek admitted later that the poem grew on her, too. Thanks for your kind reply!

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

Link to post
Share on other sites
Fresh Federation snow on the hoods, trunks,

and window glass of cars in a half-filled lot --

her legs (with the bass between and kick-drum on

the beats) took me a long, hard way from Pravda;

the inside of her Volvo was still warm.

 

Hey Tony it has been awhile, but waiting to read this was worth it. This is a gem of a small poem. Sensual, reflective, a little melancholy all blend into one of your best. I loved it.

 

~~Tink

 

Can I question the comma after Fresh?

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

Link to post
Share on other sites

Thank you, Tinker. First, it's nice to see you again, as always, and I hope your holidays and everything else have been going well.

 

I'm excited that you like this poem. When you didn't reply before, I thought you didn't care for it.

Tinker wrote:

 

Can I question the comma after Fresh?

Definitely. I agree that it doesn't belong there, so I will remove it. Thanks for catching that and for pointing it out.

 

If you liked this poem, you might like another short one written around the same time. Allow me to shamelessly provide a link to it icon_smile.gif --Mongolia. I haven't written anything new in awhile, but I hope to have another short one coming soon.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

Link to post
Share on other sites
Aleksandra

tonyv wrote:I like it! icon_biggrin.png Thank you, Rumisong for resurrecting Ukraina Hotel. I think it's better than my more recent stuff.

 

 

Don't be so modest Tony :) . You have a lot of good recent stuffs. Should I start to talk again? icon_biggrin.png

 

tonyv wrote:

 

Alek admitted later that the poem grew on her, too.

 

Tony

 

Yes thats right. I admitted when I went deeper into it. But I had my own reasons why I didn't like a lot at the beginning :icon_razz: . But now - I like this one, and Industry too icon_biggrin.png

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

Link to post
Share on other sites

Join the conversation

You can post now and register later. If you have an account, sign in now to post with your account.
Note: Your post will require moderator approval before it will be visible.

Guest
Reply to this topic...

×   Pasted as rich text.   Paste as plain text instead

  Only 75 emoji are allowed.

×   Your link has been automatically embedded.   Display as a link instead

×   Your previous content has been restored.   Clear editor

×   You cannot paste images directly. Upload or insert images from URL.

×
×
  • Create New...

Important Information

By using this site, you agree to our Guidelines.