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Frank E Gibbard

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Frank E Gibbard

My craft was sinking

The mother ship!

Going, I’m thinking

Like my hopes in

The greater game.

Going down

With the ship

Skipper of my own

Misfortune but

Taking it

Traditionally.

Shot to pieces,

As a species;

All aboard,

Fated not

To succeed,

To recede

To nothing,

Rock bottom.

A whole fleet

With Davy Jones

Whole kit and

'Boodle

In His Locker

Zilch!

Nada!

Ground zero!

Game over!

But I’d

Get my enemy

Next time.

A case of

Swings and

Roundabouts.

Shipping losses,

Snowball injuries,

Hit a peak

Around

Christmas

Time.

 

(Happy New Year! Frank)

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goldenlangur

Hello Frank,

 

 

Makes a rather sombre reading this - the sinking of the

mother ship

and with it

my hopes in the greater game

.

 

Your mention of Davy Jones took me googling and yes his notorious reputation and presence does seem to chime in with the general gloom in the piece. The details:

 

Ground zero!

Game over!

 

has a grim finality about it. I wonder if this alludes to the destruction of any hopes in the middle east and Zimbabwe and the DR Congo?

 

 

But you could well be describing a board game, which I gather is popular at this time of the year icon_smile.gif

 

 

Happy New Year icon_smile.gif

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Frank E Gibbard

Thanks Golden, hello to you and happy New Year. Yes, much can be read into anything written. It is part of the fun. Had I called this Battleships it's straightway more prosaic - end of story. I like to play games. Cheers, Frank. icon_basketball.gif

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I like how the poem reveals a strategy:

My craft was sinking

The mother ship!

ventures into the tempestuous waters of revenge:

Ground zero!

Game over!

But I’d

Get my enemy

Next time,

and leaves the reader treading in the calm of its wake:

Shipping losses,

Snowball injuries,

Hit a peak

Around

Christmas

Time.

 

Tony

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May this year be better than the last for us all!!

 

Frank an interesting fractured perspective, about so many things at once, quite unlike your straightforward clarity icon_lol.gif But with your usual flair and precise word choices. I really enjoyed and highly approve, of its motion, its shifting perspectives and its almost scolding tone.

 

Well done!

 

DC

Gate(less.thumb.png.dc23b19d2478d37a9f6fcdc563973026.pnghttps://conjurd.substack.com/welcome Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-)

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Aleksandra

Interesting poem, Frank, with nice details, and I like it too the line: The mother ship!

 

Thanks for sharing.

 

ALeksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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