Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 inspired by the song same title sung by katy perry. i love this former gospel singer's music. she is a excellent song writer. Thinking of You I think of you as I lie away awake in the night. Thinking of you is the only thing I do. It has been so long since I looked you in the eyes. Looking into your eyes I know I want you. Take me away no more mistakes I need you. Second best is all I seem to ever know, I taste your lips like a hurricane blows. We met in the stairway to heaven. I am glad we have met. It was meant to be, like the seas that have boundaries. I wish we could have spent one more night together. No more mistakes, I want you to stay. Looking into your eyes the last time we hugged and embraced. How would I know winter would come early. You would leave me in a whirlwind the next day. Oh angels take me away for I would like you to stay. But as fate would have it it was not meant to be. How would I know my harsher words would drive you away. How do I get better for I have been told there are many fish in the sea. I feel out of touch and out of time. I still feel second best is all I will know. Thinking of you, thinking of you. I was looking into your eyes. You noticed my deep blue eyes. But it wasn’t meant to be. Soon I will meet someone new. Take me away no more mistakes. I will fall in love again. You told me there are many fish in the sea. Our passion is no more Joyce. But in my dreams I will meet Elizabeth. For my angels have told me this. I have foreseen this. When I am with her I am thinking of someone else. I will meet pleasure in another life. Thinking of you, thinking of you is all I ever do. When will this nightmare ever end. Once upon a time I loved Joyce but now I love Beth. It is just the way it is we both have regrets, how I bled and how you wept at the day we divorced. I saw a apple in the tree I picked the ripest one. It wasn’t you Joyce. It was Elizabeth Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 These are my favorite lines from the body of the poem, Victor: How would I know winter would come early. You would leave me in a whirlwind the next day. But, in a more general sense, I like how the poem starts out with some statements that might be uttered by any lover and ends with a delve into the mystical and the personal: Soon I will meet someone new ... Our passion is no more Joyce. But in my dreams I will meet Elizabeth. For my angels have told me this. I have foreseen this. When I am with her I am thinking of someone else. I will meet pleasure in another life ... Once upon a time I loved Joyce but now I love Beth ... It is just the way it is we both have regrets, how I bled and how you wept at the day we divorced The final couplet effectively blends bitterness with smugness: I saw a apple in the tree I picked the ripest one. It wasn’t you Joyce. It was Elizabeth Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 This opening made me go through the poem to find out more "I think of you as I lie away awake in the night. Thinking of you is the only thing I do. It has been so long since I looked you in the eyes. Looking into your eyes I know I want you. Take me away no more mistakes I need you." It hints already of a turmoil at the outset. And the poem ends with a contradiction, a different realization. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 22, 2009 Author Share Posted May 22, 2009 thanks tony and joel for your responses. much appreciated. vic aka larsen Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frank E Gibbard Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 An empassioned outpouring from you Larse, very strong and as ever heartfelt. Frank Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 Good poem Vic. I love this expression: I taste your lips like a hurricane blows. Bw I like how you are writing in the way Elizabeth VS Joyce :). Good job Vic. Glad to read all these series of poems. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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