douglas Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 the water the water cool upon my face like your cold hands caressing me leaving a lingering trace your frozen love is so pure and clean cold passion that preserves my heart a freeze bringing together shimmering pieces once pulled far apart from mist to water from water to ice the frosts of your adoration descend from the skies leaving me as soft and sensuous as driven snow this is the coldness that i love to know. Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 A chilling Poem Actually, its not- It is warm, well composed and reflects the abstract beauty of Virgin Snow in the deep forest, immediate sensual, and clear... Well done Douglas;-) Dr. C Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 This is my favorite type of poem Douglas: a highly lyrical love poem. You make effective use of repetition, and adoration is used swimmingly. Not too long, not too short -- a contemporary sonnet with a killer concluding couplet -- the poem is just right in every way. Perfect title, too! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 22, 2009 Author Share Posted May 22, 2009 dearest dr con, thank you for your beautiful feedback! i appreciate it very much... and sweet tony, your crit is so wonderful and conscious - and very flattering. thank you very much indeed... (i am entering a romantic phase again, need a break from the existential, so you'll be reading more of this type of poem from me!) Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 beautiful imagery from beginning to end. very enjoyable read. vic aka larsen Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 22, 2009 Author Share Posted May 22, 2009 thanks so much vic - aka larsen - much appreciated as always! Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 Dear Doug. I loved this poem. This is perfect expression: leaving me as soft and sensuous as driven snow And then the ending part is very well: this is the coldness that i love to know. douglas wrote: (i am entering a romantic phase again, need a break from the existential, so you'll be reading more of this type of poem from me!) I am happy to hear this Douglas :) . What happened? Would you like to share the reason for romantic phase Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 22, 2009 Author Share Posted May 22, 2009 thank you for your response my sweet alex! well, there is no body in particular... but i have a romantic feeling in my heart - perhaps it's my intuition - maybe there is love around the corner! i am moving to london on april 3 - so maybe something will happen.... Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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