JoelJosol Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 His poem lifted my eyes up the ceiling of his ambition, from where his lines hang down to expose a body, twisted, breathless. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 Joel, WOW! You just crossed over to the next level of artistry. This powerful poem took my breath away. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 Hello JoelJosol, How well you suggest and not tell allowing the reader a layered interpretation. The contrast between ceiling of his ambition and the body exposed is startling ad works well to convey a brutal sense of reckoning. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 JJ, A wonderful piece- simply superb. Stark Powerful- "a finger pointing" well done... DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 Fantastic poem, Joel. My lines are dead next to this. It reminds me of Louise Glück's ARCHAIC FRAGMENT. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 22, 2009 Share Posted May 22, 2009 Tinker wrote: Joel, WOW! You just crossed over to the next level of artistry. This powerful poem took my breath away. ~~Tink Ah definitely I agree with Tinker. The poems takes the breath. Amazing poem. Goes in the group of the best poems of yours :). The end hits: from where his lines hang down to expose a body, twisted, breathless Excellent job. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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