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dr_con

Vines and Entanglements
5.28.2020 Con/Jur/d

Draped or Hung?
    He asks
English Ivy walls
    I said
Doesn’t prepare us
    We look
For Hedge Bindweed
    Back aches
I wonder
    Keep it open
The minute I finish
    Turn around
It’s back again
    Keep it simple
Seeds roots flower
    Simpler
Bound Ground Border?
    Too didactic
twist twist twist
    More enthusiasm
Twist Twist Twist!
    Better
Ahh I see
    Draped or Hung?


 

 

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Remarkably easy (and a pleasure) to read. I love this:

6 hours ago, dr_con said:

Bound Ground Border?
    Too didactic
twist twist twist
    More enthusiasm
Twist Twist Twist!

    Better

Ahh I see
    Draped or Hung?

[emphasis mine]

A good one, Juris!

Tony

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A. Baez
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For Hedge Bindweed
    Back aches
I wonder
    Keep it open
The minute I finish
    Turn around
It’s back again

Ha ha, I so relate to this! And I like the two "backs" here back to back--it definitely conveys of something creeping up behind one's back.

Interesting--to think of the juxtaposition between nature's unruly, order-devouring twists vs. man's orderly, disciplining ones. That's something that, as a gardener, I'd never thought of!

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David W. Parsley

Hi doc, I like the use of line breaks and indents to promote the "twistiness" of the poem.  The short lines also imply an apparent simplicity that is appealing.

Cool!
- David

 

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Tinker

Hi DC,  The ivy parasite that climbs and kills trees, tangling in all sorts of pattern, if removed leaves its footprint. This is the first thought that came to mind when I read this.  It doesn’t hang or drape, it clings and yes it twists and winds and binds.  Just trying to sort these images sounds painful.  Interesting piece that I will come back to.

~~Judi

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