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Clouds

Summer in darkness
under masks and mass marches,
where is the season's sunshine?

Look above the clouds,
seek knowledge and empathy,
warm days can follow cold storms.
                             ~~Judi Van Gorder


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badger11

I so agree Judi. empathy  is such a guiding word for me because I find myself so remote from 'dark' clouds. This morning I uprooted some broad beans overrun with blackfly, but enjoyed the scent of sweet peas that have thrived in the wet sunny weather. We have been limited to five miles travelling in Wales. It feels like how life was lived before the advent of trains/cars, a local life where the warmth comes from inside, and from the outside the 'world news' is like news from another galaxy.

I like the positive direction of your poem. I've always believed, and experienced, that happiness is as inevitable as unhappiness.

all the best

Phil

 

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Judi, this one's concise. I like that it doesn't dwell on current events, rather the mention in L2 (15 percent or one out of six lines) seems almost incidental; the poem's mood works when applied to other circumstance, whichever might be affecting the reader, also.

I also like "Look above the clouds." There can be storms below, but aircraft pilots and passengers see a different view. Nice work!

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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On 7/2/2020 at 5:17 AM, badger11 said:

I've always believed, and experienced, that happiness is as inevitable as unhappiness.

Interesting observation, Phil.

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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A. Baez

I like the sound and sense of

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Summer in darkness
under masks and mass marches

and the half-rhyme of "darkness" and "marches." This is a nice paradox, too.

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where is the season's sunshine?

A simple but surprisingly effective line.

And I, too, like

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look above the clouds

--a simple metaphor that can read so many ways. In this case, I guess, the "clouds" are right down where we are--masks, marches, etc.!

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