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This New Year's Eve


JoelJosol

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You used my pant's pocket as drop box

slipping into it a note

 

(a raffle entry to win your heart maybe?)

signed with your name, I bet.

 

It was New Year's Eve when I pulled it out

in time for the fireworks
 

lighting up  my face, 

breaking out into a smile.

 

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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David W. Parsley

Joel, I like the playful, flirty feel of this piece.  It tantalizes me with missing details: where did this sleight-of-hand occur?  Was there a look exchanged? Did you know at the time?  What kind of light prefigured fireworks in the other's gaze?  etc.

 - David

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JoelJosol

Thanks, David. That is exactly the intent, for the reader to supply their own details for their own personal experience of the poem.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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