dr_con Posted May 24, 2009 Share Posted May 24, 2009 The Machine The Prophet asked me "Do you hear the machine?" and I do, I do. The ambient hum the space between gears of great ships bigger than stars World Eaters, just behind those shadows on a clear sunny day, or the mirror-verse imitating perfectly except for the blemish just there when you pay attention, thin like Shakespeare's scrawl cataloging future narratives, we can pick from- a clothing rack in the Abrahamic store of Betrayal, Madness Judgment and Being- A suit that cuts like a knife disassembles to the core a simile that relates past reason or assemblage the click, click of moving parts the objective reality of a gun or the silent roar of radiation and sun spots playing the crucial hand in evolution's parlor "Of course I hear The Machine" I sat before the Throne I have congress with angels and demons "I declared I was human" before the uncaring story full of grace, killed by translation and reborn an atheist the truth reproducible that the greatest act of faith is to reject the parts to see clearly the whole. Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted May 24, 2009 Share Posted May 24, 2009 dr_con, I hear as if a dialog between The Prophet and N. The ending stanza is great with wisdom. Is The Machine allegory of something? Still pondering. Lake Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 24, 2009 Share Posted May 24, 2009 DrC, even games could inspire you! This is a collage of a poem in terms of allusions and phrases. You are echoing the early Modern Poets. The only thing missing is foreign words :-) Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rhymeguy Posted May 24, 2009 Share Posted May 24, 2009 This is my take- Organized religion has consistantly misrepresented god and faith; driven many away from belief and assisted in the developement of atheistic thought. That is it in my nut shell. I personally could not agree more. I love this line: "we can pick from- a clothing rack in the Abrahamic store of Betrayal, Madness Judgment and Being-" The last two verses really bring it home. Great work, one of my favorites!! Thanks, rg Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 24, 2009 Author Share Posted May 24, 2009 Thanks All! Yes Lake that is the question ;-) Allegory for/or ? Thanks for your insight! JJ- As a matter of fact, I have tried writing several poems based on board games, so far nathing that satisfies Rumi- Indeed although depending on my mood I can read it as the opposite Many Thanks to you all for engaging! My deepest appreciation, Dr. Con Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 24, 2009 Share Posted May 24, 2009 An effective continuum which demonstrates in no uncertain terms the efficiency of "The Machine." I love the image of ships bigger than stars and the "World Eaters." Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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