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Ugly white monster

staring at me with eyes unseen,

a mocking evil glare.

Had you a throat

you would laugh,

a sneering guttural sound.

You defeat me with your silence.

Though you possess secrets

you offer none.

Though pushed and cajoled

you yield nothing.

You tease with hope

but deliver despair.

And I, fool that I am,

stare back at you,

beseeching you to show mercy

though I know you never will.

But I will not succumb to your torture.

I will engage you eternally.

For I am a poet, damn it!

And you are only paper.

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I love how you fought back against the "ugly white monster" by composing this free form poem. This part is especially frustrating:

Though you possess secrets

you offer none.

Though pushed and cajoled

you yield nothing.

You tease with hope

but deliver despair.

In the end, you manage it all with a bit of defiance. Well done.

 

One small suggestion: perhaps the title could simply be The Blank Page? In the first line you provide that detail ...

 

Tony

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Thanks guys! I am affraid I will be producing a lot more of this "frustrated stuff" as I am (frustrated that is.) Probabably good for me. As you know I think in rhyme. Of late rhyme is just not coming to me so I am trying to branch out. So I guess out of frustration may come experience. So if you see some real crap don't hesitant to say so.

 

I changed the title.

 

rg

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Frank E Gibbard

Nice one rg, we here can relate, the demanding void. Did you mean secrets not secretes BTW? Frank

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Of course I meant secrets- never could spell worth a sh... :). Made the change.

 

Glad you could identify. Thanks for reading and commenting.

 

rg

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Interesting and lovely poem. You are doing fine out of rhyme - ( I sound like a rhyme girl now icon_biggrin.png ). Really, I love your " frustrated " works rg.

 

You played around very wise with the spirit of this wonderful poem. I love this expression: You defeat me with your silence.

 

Also I enjoyed this part very much:

 

You tease with hope

but deliver despair.

And I, fool that I am,

stare back at you,

 

this line is perfect:

 

For I am a poet, damn it!

 

Thanks for the enjoyable read

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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