David W. Parsley Posted September 9, 2011 Share Posted September 9, 2011 THIRTEEN WAYS OF LOOKING AT 50+ YEARS OF POETRY Re-revised: IX So little depends upon a pitch and copper doghouse grazed by pot holes pursuant the pack barking the last blackbird from view. unpublished © David W. Parsley 2011 Re: poems of William Carlos Williams "The Red Wheelbarrow" http://writing.upenn.edu/~afilreis/88/wcw-red-wheel.html/ "Paterson: Preface" http://arch.ttu.edu/wiki/William_Carlos_Williams_-_Paterson/ "Fine Work with Pitch and Copper" http://andrewlansdown.com/favourite-poems/william-carlos-williams/ Revised: IX So much depends upon a red doghouse glazed with rooftiles jouncing behind the pack that barked the last blackbirds out of sight. Previous: IX So much depends on a red doghouse jouncing behind the pack that barked the last blackbirds out of sight glazed by rainwater at the edge of rooftiles nailed in many circles beside the white chickens. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted September 13, 2011 Author Share Posted September 13, 2011 Revised to be more minimalist, more Williams-esque. - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted September 19, 2011 Share Posted September 19, 2011 THIRTEEN WAYS OF LOOKING AT 50+ YEARS OF POETRY Revised: IX So much depends upon a red doghouse glazed with rooftiles jouncing behind the pack that barked the last blackbirds out of sight. unpublished © David W. Parsley 2011 Re: poems of William Carlos Williams "The Red Wheelbarrow" http://writing.upenn.edu/~afilreis/88/wcw-red-wheel.html/ "Paterson: Preface" http://arch.ttu.edu/wiki/William_Carlos_Williams_-_Paterson/ "Fine Work with Pitch and Copper" http://andrewlansdown.com/favourite-poems/william-carlos-williams/ Previous: IX So much depends on a red doghouse jouncing behind the pack that barked the last blackbirds out of sight glazed by rainwater at the edge of rooftiles nailed in many circles beside the white chickens. hi DP Some discussion of WCW by members: http://www.poetrymagnumopus.com/index.php?showtopic=2039 Perhaps you would consider some white space in shaping your poem: Again so much depends upon the red doghouse etc badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted September 20, 2011 Author Share Posted September 20, 2011 Excellent feedback, badge! I have decided to model the structure completely after "The Red Wheelbarrow," while still nodding to the Stevens orginal and the other WCW sources. That had the benefit of freeing me to address the poetic sound elements so deftly employed by Williams in the original. Perhaps this is now becoming a "worthy parody" at last! Thanks for the suggestion and the pointer.By the way, that was a very stimulating discussion at the link site. While I find this and other miniatures pleasing, I do not always find such rewards in WCW. I just wanted to pick on one that a lot of people would recognize.Still, I shouldn't complain: apparently Donald Hall's discussion of the piece motivated Tinker to go on her quest for poetic form. And that benefits all of us here, no?- Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
poetjohncompton Posted July 9, 2023 Share Posted July 9, 2023 is this poem still unpublished?! 1 Quote https://www.facebook.com/poetjohncompton Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted December 9, 2023 Author Share Posted December 9, 2023 Hi John, thanks for looking in on the piece. Unfortunately, it is indeed still unpublished. That may be due to the fact that I kept swinging for the fences back when I tried to market it several years ago, insisting on proffering the 13-section piece in its entirety. Maybe I should dust it off and try a different approach. Thanks Again, - David 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted December 10, 2023 Share Posted December 10, 2023 https://www.ravennapress.com/alba/submit.html 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
poetjohncompton Posted December 11, 2023 Share Posted December 11, 2023 On 12/9/2023 at 10:10 AM, David W. Parsley said: Hi John, thanks for looking in on the piece. Unfortunately, it is indeed still unpublished. That may be due to the fact that I kept swinging for the fences back when I tried to market it several years ago, insisting on proffering the 13-section piece in its entirety. Maybe I should dust it off and try a different approach. Thanks Again, - David submit the whole thing and a bio to ghostcityreview@gmail.com I'm the poetry editor — below is the mag link https://ghostcitypress.com/new-archive 1 Quote https://www.facebook.com/poetjohncompton Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted December 14, 2023 Author Share Posted December 14, 2023 Gladly! Thanks for the appreciation of the piece, I like the way it fits with work that you curate for Ghost City. I will do just as you request, probably after Christmas but before the New Year. BTW, I like the pic carried on the magazine Masthead. You could be holding our cat, George! Happy Holidays! - David 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
poetjohncompton Posted December 15, 2023 Share Posted December 15, 2023 5 hours ago, David W. Parsley said: Gladly! Thanks for the appreciation of the piece, I like the way it fits with work that you curate for Ghost City. I will do just as you request, probably after Christmas but before the New Year. BTW, I like the pic carried on the magazine Masthead. You could be holding our cat, George! Happy Holidays! - David I look forward to the poem and yes, the cat makes the pic all the better 🥰 Quote https://www.facebook.com/poetjohncompton Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted January 1 Share Posted January 1 Coming in late, just want to add, I love this entire thread but especially the red doghouse. I am such a WCW fan. There is actually an invented form called the wheelbarrow It was found at the end of Chapter 1 of Donald Hall's book. I gave my copy of the book to someone years ago. Recently I thought I would really like to reread it and went on line to buy it again. It is out of print but I did find a used copy. They wanted over $125 for it. Consequently I did not buy it. ~~ Judi 1 Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted January 29 Author Share Posted January 29 Well, shiver me timbers, Judi, I had no idea such a form existed. Count on you, though, to bring a well-timed insight to PMO readers and commentators. Since the form explicitly calls for eight lines, mine must be disqualified for going a stanza too far, despite similar cadence, line length, and phrasing. On the last point, I must confess to being particularly (and naughtily) pleased with "grazed" sonically and comically substituted for WCW's "glazed" in stanza 3. And since we're talking about naughtiness and unseemly impudence toward some of our most respected poets, it should be noted that, when paired with the corresponding section in Stevens, one may achieve an implied sense of scatology in the narrative of the startled fowl. Just for Fun, - David 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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