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Baptism

 

I captured a monster today

to show to my lover- unseasonal

rain and even thunder. I used

a white piece of paper and clean

glass jar; a segmented creature

with four tiny legs and two black

 

eyes.

 

Returning, the sheet written

with hieroglyphs, drops of water

a sign- like the country bus ride

and the talk of christening

the eight month old baby

filling me with dread. John

the Baptist

 

was beheaded

 

for being a populist

baptizing anyone

who could come down to the river

regardless of class, or nobility

introducing them to their own divinity

even desert prophets

the lowest of the low

 

the birthright of all,

EVER PRESENT

ETERNAL

That moment washed in sin and

reborn, beyond god and men

simply here

 

and I wonder

would he regret

capturing generations

of monsters, or celebrate

this unfolding of Evolution's

careless and divine imperfections?

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

hi dr con. i love it. this poem real makes you think about self divinity lol. i know i should be serious but this is a very good poem on a subject we all debate about well we mostly arhue about i mean. while i believe in a higher power i think others shouldnt rule out that possibilty but freedom to choose is great. i believe in eveloution. i believe in creationism also. i don't rule out these possibilities. i have seen et's too lol.'

 

this is larsen under the profile mike lash.

 

but you can call me victor which is my birth first name. the larsen profile is a pen name to protect my identy because my family has nazi's haters because of past generation relatives actions.

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Wrap a lot in a poem as usual Dr C., the parts capturing the attention, as if the form reflects your concluding lines.

 

I captured a monster today

to show to my lover- unseasonal

rain and even thunder. I used

a white piece of paper and clean

glass jar; a segmented creature

with four tiny legs and two black

 

eyes.

 

Returning, the sheet written

with hieroglyphs, drops of water

a sign- like the country bus ride

and the talk of christening

the eight month old baby

filling me with dread. John

the Baptist

 

was beheaded

 

Now I would have ended the poem there, but then I'm not you.

 

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Thanks Badge, Larsen ;-) I see what you mean Badge, a completely different poetic reflection, maybe on re-write!

 

Thanks Guys!

 

DC

thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules.

 

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You capture the miracle (or mystery) of creation (or existence), Dr. Con. icon_smile.gif I do like the rest of the poem after beheaded, how you contrast the humble "minding his own business" activities of the political prisoner with the infringing political forces raging against him. I love the first verse, especially your use of monster and how you include the personal.

 

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