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Larsen M. Callirhoe

Damned if I Do, Damned if I Don’t

 

You will never know

how many tears I have cried,

how many miles I have walked,

how many days I have tried to succeed,

or how many nights I didn’t sleep.

 

If I promised you

the moon and the stars,

Do you believe it?

 

Damned if I do ask you out

for a dinner date.

Damned if I don’t

for I will never know

the answer one way

or the other.

 

If I told you

I had a heart of gold,

Would you believe it?

 

Dancing with the stars,

I look at the sunrise.

I hear the birds chirping

that sing with my lips.

 

I won’t get fooled again

at sunset if you just

walk away from me

without a good bye.

 

 

I swallowed my pride

to long ago

to give a damn.

 

I was revived in a car accident,

now the world looks

cold and distant.

 

I live alone

but I won’t get fooled again

damned if I do,

damned if I don’t.

Baby you walked out my door

to long ago for me to remember you

and the way we made love.

Now I realize it was only lust.

 

How I cried when you first left me.

For awhile all I did was look at the wall

and count the popcorn ceilings bumps

in the room I slept in.

 

Now I write poetry

about romance and love.

All I seem to dream about

Is writing the perfect song

Singing it to you

And making love

for over two hours

So we can feel bliss.

 

 

 

 

I have set the standards high.

Will you Nalene or Elizabeth

Watch the sunset with me

and grow old together with me?

 

For I am damned if I do

And damned if I don’t

But I still love you.

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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I thought your use of 'damned' was very effective, had the right edge.

 

 

I won’t get fooled again

 

This reminded me too much of the original song lyric

 

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An interesting piece! Many of the 'to' should be 'too', but the lyrical "Who-ness" of the song was quite engaging. I also think the last Stanza is a bit unnecessary, but do what you feel right;-)

 

Many Thanks,

 

DC

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

hi DC,

 

i couldnt agree with you more after reading it a few times aloud i deleted the last stanza. thanks for your input.

 

as for my name it is victor michael lashewitz but i use a pen name which is larsen michael callirhoe. callirhoe is a greek and aramaic word. i had studied the greek language a little and decided to use this word callirhoe

as a pen name. it means a couple of things. lashe or pronounced lashah is hebrew for callirhoe which is part of my last name but in the aramaic language but is also used in the greek language. nick tselpides knows more about this word w3hich is a street and hotel in greece also lol.

 

 

as i get older i let people call me victor but when i was younger my family called me michael.

 

i read your comment before you changed it.

 

victor

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

hi badge,

 

i thought about using will not instead of won't because of that who song but it flowed better the way i ended up writing it. if you think will not flows better than won't i will change it in my poem.

 

cheers my poetry friend.

 

victor aka larsen

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Hi Victor,

 

You express the no-win situation quite well. I like this:

 

I swallowed my pride

to long ago

to give a damn

and this:

For awhile all I did was look at the wall

and count the popcorn ceilings bumps

in the room I slept in

the most.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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