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Poem of irritation- distance


Bloodyday
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The distance-

 

 

 

The distance from the point

 

Where we stopped

 

and walked away

 

And the rest of my life

 

I am just watching the distance growing

 

Sometimes it hurts like a woundless pain

 

Pityful is nothing

 

But just to shed tears anymore

 

 

 

I still stand waiting for the same

 

Wish I could erase it all and all the blame

 

The distance from my existence

 

From my eyesight

 

From my heart beat

 

From my feelings

 

Perhaps you are now the happy one

 

Leaving me behind

 

What I am not supposed to be.

 

 

 

I try to catch you in the wind

 

Sometimes in my dream

 

Or sometimes in reality

 

Cloud drizzles on my palm

 

Or the sun shines on my face

 

Or the snow covers my loneliness

 

You are still the same like mountains of thousand years

 

Sometimes I thought I born for your smile

 

Sometimes I thought I born for your stare

 

All the things you have gift those days

 

Perhaps my memory is not able to erase

 

 

 

Days after months

 

Months after years

 

Counting the end of my presence

 

But I still can remember you in distance!

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Welcome back, Rony! I'm happy for you that you're enjoying Sweden. I'm envious, too. I've been there. I like it a lot, and I'd like to go again.

 

This is truly a great poem. Like so many of your works, it's filled with the freshest expressions. Woundless pain, "pityful is nothing," "cloud drizzles on my palm" -- there are too many good ones to list them all. And the title's a winner, too.

 

For me, reading your work is bittersweet: it inspires me, but it also reminds me of my own inadequacies. Do post more poems soon ...

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Hi Rony,

 

Welcome back! I echo Tony on your fresh expressions such as "Woundless pain"...

Sometimes, I envy the science students who write poetry - it must be their field of study that enable them to write something out of norm.

When I read S1, I thought this is about one's journey; but upon reading S2, this leads to a love poem.

"vanish", I thought it is an intransitive verb, can it have an object as in your "Wish I could vanish it "?

 

Enjoy your study and stay in Sweden!

 

Lake

 

PS: Don't understand why it didn't show it got two replies.

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Welcome back, Rony! I'm happy for you that you're enjoying Sweden. I'm envious, too. I've been there. I like it a lot, and I'd like to go again.

 

This is truly a great poem. Like so many of your works, it's filled with the freshest expressions. Woundless pain, "pityful is nothing," "cloud drizzles on my palm" -- there are too many good ones to list them all. And the title's a winner, too.

 

For me, reading your work is bittersweet: it inspires me, but it also reminds me of my own inadequacies. Do post more poems soon ...

 

Tony

 

Hi tonyv

 

it so cold here but Sundsvall is a nice town and the study and labwork is going like hum-drum........i don't know what i have written but many days later, i have something to write.....but i need to improve more......that's all i know!

 

thanks for your inspiration!

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Hi Rony,

 

Welcome back! I echo Tony on your fresh expressions such as "Woundless pain"...

Sometimes, I envy the science students who write poetry - it must be their field of study that enable them to write something out of norm.

When I read S1, I thought this is about one's journey; but upon reading S2, this leads to a love poem.

"vanish", I thought it is an intransitive verb, can it have an object as in your "Wish I could vanish it "?

 

Enjoy your study and stay in Sweden!

 

Lake

 

PS: Don't understand why it didn't show it got two replies.

 

 

hi Lake

 

nice and wise comment....i tried to fix it up but don't know is it good or not.

 

 

but it always to have replies from the known ones!

 

thanks again for your comment!

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Well, well, Rony. How nice to see you here after some time and read you.

 

This poem gives wonderful image of love and longing. You express wonderful the pain. The expressions what you use are brilliant and I love your way. Always is good to improve and you do that very well. This is wonderful poem, very poetical and emotional.

 

I loved what I read.

 

Yes as Tony said, do post more poems, and give us the pleasure to read them.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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