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Spring ephemerals

perform quickly in the sun.

Carpet of colors.

 

Their stage is open briefly

before the curtain of leaves.

 

 

 

'keeper 043013 / 2330

from the black desert

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Short, well crafted and seasonally appropriate. Has been much on my mind as of late but you captured it perfectly.

 

 

Many Thanks,

 

Juris

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Gatekeeper

And they just got dumped on with more snow.

I have no recollection of snow in May here.

The new climate, I fear . . .

from the black desert

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  • 5 weeks later...
David W. Parsley

Hi Gatekeeper, I really like this capture of youth with its spontaneous, fleeting beauty. Such a fine pleasure, too, to see the respect for form and the common root of haiku and tanka: a complete haiku coupled with a reply, honoring syllable count and other ancient conventions. Co-best of all, it has the enlightened feel of those contemplative roots, the airy transparency breathed through the ageless practitioners of this art. I am wondering if I have ever read a purer (despite the opening explication of season) or better tanka.

 

Plaudits!

- Dave

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High praise, indeed.

 

Deserved? While there have been years of study and practice, I find little to compare it with these days.

 

Thanks.

from the black desert

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