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Third ounce of whisky

releases a day's trouble

sleep comes more quickly

 

with dreams perhaps of Ireland

or crags and moors of Scotland

 

 

 

 

051813 / 0030

from the black desert

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a paean to the drink! Nicely done- from a mostly X scotch drinkr;-)

 

 

J & DC

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Hi Gatekeeper, I really like this tanka. It is just real and easy and unthreatening. I'm not much on alcholol but I do like a glass of wine on occassion and though I could never gag down a scotch, bourbon or whiskey I can still relate to your images with a comfortable acceptance.

 

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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Dreams of Ireland & Scotland.....Would that mean nightmares of Tennessee for American Whisky? :)

 

Using the count of "third" gives this, to me, a bit of a sense of danger.

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Thanks for the comments

 

Tinker - Perhaps you have been exposed only to not very good scotch. There is a very wide range available these days. An acquired taste some say - perhaps so. I find wine to be rather unappealing more often than not. To each . . .

 

dc - Nightmares of Tennessee? - could be, since I am not a fan of American whiskey and spent some military time along the K/T border in the late 60's. :wink:

Why third ounce? First didn't seem to carry any weight. Second would have been okay except I wanted only one syllable and fourth seemed too many.

from the black desert

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I love your little verses! How could four be too many? Unless you don't care how you feel, in the morning.

mq

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