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Digital angels ride quantum bees. Fire is ice, ice is fire. The end of language, matrix of symbols. Heaven and hell have merged. Water bandits are the new police. Christly consciousness spread across computer matrix.

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David W. Parsley

Fascinating take on the End of Literacy and the beginnings of something that will ineluctably follow the Information Age.  Highly original and disturbing.  It seems like it would be helped by introducing a somewhat concrete person here, a witnessing narrator and others.  To illustrate, such a re-working might replace that fourth sentence with something like:

A man I once knew announces from the dark web, Heaven and Earth are now a merged app!

This is not intended to be used as is, just illustrative.  Something concrete would lend immediacy and connection to your dystopia.

Just a thought.
- David

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Thankfully, for now, our members here are still able to offer their own opinions. Could there be a day when replies to poems will be generated by questionably-well-meaning artificial intelligence's application of injudicious algorithms? I hope not!

Tony 🤯

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Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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