JoelJosol Posted December 13, 2018 Share Posted December 13, 2018 I can feel the heat of the sun but where is the warmth of love? I can hear the birds chirping but where is the sound of joy? People all around wear their widest smiles but where is my happiness? How can I stretch my lips to feign a smile when it is my mind that is stiff? How can I be in a crowd, intermixing shadows, but feel so alone? Why from all the mobile calls I only get busy tones when all I need is someone with their arms around me, to shelter me from this loneliness? Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted December 13, 2018 Share Posted December 13, 2018 Beautiful existential summary of sadness and loneliness I'm particularly taken with 4 minutes ago, JoelJosol said: Why from all the mobile calls I only get busy tones Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted December 17, 2018 Author Share Posted December 17, 2018 Dr_con, thanks for the feedback. I am glad that the poem was successful to carry across its message. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted December 18, 2018 Share Posted December 18, 2018 Joel, The lonilness is palpable. Each line a gem. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FrasMac Posted December 20, 2018 Share Posted December 20, 2018 Strong writing, and distictly contemporary. I struggle to be such, hence admire those who can do it this well. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted December 30, 2018 Share Posted December 30, 2018 I agree with the others, Joel, in that this is very good and re the contemporary feel. I think the first line is my favorite. After all, without an atmosphere to temper its effect, sunlight is only … radiation. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted January 13, 2019 Author Share Posted January 13, 2019 Thank guys. December is such a merry season that loneliness would be such a contrast. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted January 18, 2019 Share Posted January 18, 2019 The long lines and raped questions somehow remind me of Sandburg AND Whitman, if that's possible. The anxiety is palpable. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted January 30, 2019 Author Share Posted January 30, 2019 Thanks dcmarti1. I have not read Sandburg. I will find the poet's works to educate myself. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted February 1, 2019 Share Posted February 1, 2019 beautifully elegant and wistful... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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